He's back
he's back to remind me of that day
a day so dark
not even a tornado of light
could have persuaded my head to pull itself up
to look at its illumination
my Raven, he came to see me
to sit with me
and to let me know
he was here to comfort me
I often wonder if he will ever just stop visiting?
what would I have to do to send him away forever?
I never really speak to him
after all he's just a bird?
he's a Raven, he's my very own Raven
on days of dark like today
he comes
to acknowledge my grief in silence
but today I plucked up the courage
to ask him...
"will you visit me
on the same very dark date
every year"?
he replied...
let go of all your grief
and I'll be gone
maybe, just maybe someday I will?
I’ll miss him though
ironically, I’ll probably grieve for him too.
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- Comment from author about the poem: ( From my Raven collection) There are some dates that I could never forget even if I tried, one being the 7th of December. ❤️
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Now that is a splendid twist on personification. Very effective in carrying the message across.
Thank you dear arqios, 🌹
There is deep wisdom in this poem. Sometimes we grow so used to grief itself that we miss it. Grief does seem to be one of the main muses of poetry. Pollitt and songwriting are inspired often by minor keys, and I believe deeper emotions come from sadness than from joy. The most beautiful write Teddy
Most honoured and humbled by your words dear sorrenbarret thank you dear friend. 🌹
oh for the love of the raven who shares our grief Teddy.
a poem to touch many hearts.
My dear Melvin, you and I have a lot of visits! Thank you so much my dear friend. 🌹
Excellent write Teddy
Thank you dear Tony. 🌹
You're welcome
Good write, Teddy. Yes you will grief is grief.
Thank you dear Jerry. 🌹
Beautiful poetry Teddy. Your Raven keeping you company as you grieve. Maybe you would miss him if he didn’t visit? I think grief softens with time, so maybe your Raven will always visit. Loss never completely goes. We just learn to live with it. Lovely touching words. 🌹❤️
So right my dear Cassie, I am incredibly fond of my Raven. Thank you for your compassionate response ❤️ it's the same for all of us 💗
Wow. Beautiful work, sad and powerful, sweet Teddy.
Thank you dearest Thomas, one very close toy heart. 🌹
"There are some dates that I could never forget even if I tried, one being the 7th of December. ❤️" Friend, I am not sure of the significance of that date to you...but whatever it is...I can tell you it sparked a significant piece of art in this, my friend. I mean everything I say, sincerely. This is...just wow! This poem is beautiful...I am not joking that this poem is up there, for me, with Mr. Poe's ancient bird of Nevermore! I mean that. Obviously the poem is different structurally...but in terms of impact. Wow! Let me ask you, dearest Teddy, is your Raven collection published and able to be purchased...because I would immediately! 😊❤️ I'm a fan!
Such kind words dear Tristan, the significance was that my 25 year old brother was buried that day in 1998 and I was 24 it was my first shock of death and it was truly brutal. My mother eventually died of a broken heart in 2012 she never did recover her loss. I\'m truly humbled by your kind words, my raven collection is here you can read them all for free I usually headline them as being from my Raven collection which was in fact inspired by The Raven Edgar Allen Poe an extraordinary poem. Ive never been published in a book but please help yourself on my list anytime you feel like it. Thank you! ❤️ 🤗
Oh. Wow! Well, from what I have read of your Raven Collection...I really love them. I was actually going to comment, so I might as well here, that this piece is a perfect follow up to the Raven itself. I was thinking that as I read it. And, I can tell you, Teddy, I will be checking them out. Poe is a kindred spirit of mine when it comes to literary influences. Him, Charles Baudelaire (who also admired Poe), and...wait for it...Jim Morrison...who admired both Baudelaire and Poe. LOL! Needless to say, like you my dear friend, I have Poe very much in my blood. So, please do know, I mean every word I have said. This poem is VERY MUCH publish worthy. In fact, your work in general is very publish worthy! I have attempted to get published traditionally, but I have yet to. So, I have never been published either, unless you count my high school ❤️ magazine! 🤣 Anyway, I am rambling at this point. So, let me just say thank you! 🙏
Thank you so much dear Tristan for your encouraging words on my work, I've been offered many publishing contracts but with a price that I myself would have to pay so basically I could do it myself it's called self publishing, I'm always overwhelmed to know that other writers and poets enjoy my work so unless I too am offered a traditional contract my work can be found here for free. ❤️ Thank you so much, yours is most certainly publish worthy too. 🌹
Exactly! Yes, I have been offered those too and, as you basically said, no thank you! And besides, this site provides more than just our work getting read, and even more than money, it provides community, and that for me is priceless. Even if I did get published, I’d still be on here sharing! 😂 Anyway, all of that to say, I truly admire your work Teddy! Hope you have a great day, friend!
We all have those dates Teddy, yesterday was my wife's birthday and on the 30th of this month was the day she passed into heaven.
Andy
💜 thank you for sharing dearest Andy, you have shared this before and if it's any consolation the 8th of December is a celebration of christmas here in Italy. 🌹
yes, you are right - some dates are so dark and sad, they keep haunting you time and again
hoping you get over them, and find solace
So very kind dear NafisaSB, we all have these dates someway or another, I have much solace I just love to write about it. Thank you 🌹
yes, getting it off your chest is one way to lighten the burden
wishing you peace of mind, and brighter days in 2025
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