Holding Back the Smile

Neville

Holding Back the Smile

 

As slow as the night took hold

of them both ..

She proceeded to remove each

of the gold rings

and to discard her robes for him

as was instructed ..

However, she refused to offer

a hint of a smile,

or to relinquish the slave band ..

 

  • Author: Neville (Offline Offline)
  • Published: December 11th, 2024 04:27
  • Comment from author about the poem: as long as you have the write to choose, you have the right to decide .. just be sure you choose carefully & writefully .. 🤍
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  • sorenbarrett

    The comment as poetic and with as much word play as the poem itself. Neville you are devilish in the working of words this poem is no exception. Enigmatic, yet full of deep meaning. Written as a mystery a puzzle I choose care fully and intend to write fully as well. Most fun and satisfying

    • Neville



      There are no flies on you my friend .. cheers for taking time to check in and consider these words of mine .. Neville 😎👍

    • teardrop

      Hi Neville, another enjoyable read. Thanks!!

      • Neville


        Bless you again dear teardrop & thank you my friend .. Neville 😎👍

      • TobaniNataiella

        I enjoyed the read and echo the sentiment in the authors comment

        • Neville



          Then I shall thank you twice .. thank you .. thank you .. Neville 😎👍

          • TobaniNataiella

            You are very welcome

          • Tristan Robert Lange

            Amen to your comment and bravo to your poem! You, my friend, are brilliant! 🌹👏

            • Neville



              Wow .. too kind but thanks a bunch Tristan .. 😎👍

            • cellinic

              Very deep and really enigmatic, I'd agree...

              • Neville



                Thanks muchly & then some .. Neville 😎👍

              • orchidee

                Was that those 5 golden rings in that Christmas song?!

                • Neville



                  I don't think so, but I guess anything is possible these days and you don't need artificial intelligence to figure that one out .. 😎🐧👍

                  • orchidee

                    'Twas the days when AI only meant.... something a bit swoony involving cows, etc.

                  • Tony36

                    Excellent write Nevilie

                    • Neville


                      Thanks Tony 👍

                      • Tony36

                        You're welcome Neville

                      • Thomas W Case

                        I've been there. lol. I love your work. Great job.

                        • Neville


                          I am truly honoured Thomas, many thanks indeed .. Neville

                        • rebellion_in_sanity

                          A subject very close to my heart. Expressed beautifully. A study in ecconomy of words

                          • Neville


                            That's what I like to hear .. two metaphorical birds killed with one philosophical stone is write up my alley .. cheers r_i_s .. Neville 😎👍

                          • Goldfinch60

                            Just choose carefully Neville.

                            Andy

                            • Neville


                              You bet ya bill I will .. ta Andy 😎👍

                            • arqios

                              In situations of tension and restraint, we all need to retain a modicum of emotional and psychological autonomy which reflects our exercise of control over our own spirit and identity and the retention of our dignity, however frayed in confrontation. The quiet expression of defiance and self-possession moves and evokes, raw provocation in verse!

                              • Neville



                                You said it brother .. Cheers 😎👍

                              • NafisaSB

                                good write, and good message too
                                keep them coming



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