Condemned

sorenbarrett

Tangled wire hair, plastic skulls slump, empty promises
Old electric brain dump, a sign reading "place condemned"
Tied in hypnotic beds, lie cracked mirrors reflecting Adonises 
Fractured holes, broken heads we no longer mend

Batteries bleed, evolutionary ancestor of solid state brains
Keys weeds breed, ancient technology brought to die
Worshiped discarded gods, decomposing remains
Graveyard sarcophagus pods, time frozen fossils evolved AI

Cold, heartless progeny birthed from the discarded
Sold as electric phylogeny no regard for the departed

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  • orchidee

    Sounds like a description of KP! I am horrible to her! Awww. lol.
    I rarely get the true meaning of anything 'hidden' in poems. In some cases I become offensive - 'Grr! No, I didn't meant that at all' is the reply. (lol)

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks Orchi appreciate the read and I guess that is the point none of us ever really do. Have a great day

    • TobaniNataiella

      Sounds like an old Mental Health Hospital i used to help out in, but no, i am still working it out but have enjoyed my daily read, thank you

      • sorenbarrett

        Thank you for the read Tobani it is most appreciated

        • TobaniNataiella

          You are very welcome

        • arqios

          Captured me entirely. As a child both being entirely fascinated and at once repulsed by leaking batteries, your imagery paints in the walls of the mind! A definite keeper in this poem. 🙏🏻🕊👍🏻

          • sorenbarrett

            Thanks my firiend your words are always cherrished.

            • arqios

              Welcome Soren 🙏🏻🕊👍🏻

            • rin

              From a human perspective, it's a dystopia, but I wonder if it's possible to shine a light of hope even from there.

              • sorenbarrett

                Hope is the last thing to die. Maybe in the future things and people will be more valued and the idea of discarding the old will turn to how to make better use of them but not until a consumer oriented economy transforms into something else

                • rin

                  I see, I'm satisfied that I was able to get a deep insight.

                • NinjaGirl

                  the abandoned never truly disappears, does it?

                  • sorenbarrett

                    We are all abandoned in one way or another. Thanks for the read and comment. Have a great day

                  • Teddy.15

                    Reading this I could see a really lonely robot. Brilliant, we really are slaves to all this technology and social media, I truly fear for my Son who isn't even 12 yet. 🌹

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thanks Teddy yes I had in mind something very close a computor, that was very old being taken away to hospice justlike they do people. Thanks for the read and kind words of comment.

                    • Tristan Robert Lange

                      "Solid state brains". An excellent poem, Soren! Loved the wording and imagery a ton! 🌹👏

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thanks Tristan appreciate the words of support.

                      • Thomas W Case

                        Powerful work.

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thanks Thomas appreciate that.

                        • rebellion_in_sanity

                          The subject is very close to my heart. A fascinating poem, makes one question the path of progress on the rubble of the dead. Loved it!

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thanks Rebellion for the review and support it means a lot

                          • Dan Williams

                            Heartless progeny is the hinge all of this swings on. That, and it takes my daughter to explain technology to me now.

                            • sorenbarrett

                              Thank you so much Dan I appeciate your continued support and comments

                            • Thad Wilk

                              Powerful poem
                              thoughts and
                              message,
                              eloquently expressed.! 👍
                              That's where all
                              computers are sent when their
                              time comes, to rest. RIP 😢
                              Thanks for scaring (sharing) 👍
                              Best regards ✌️ Thad

                              • sorenbarrett

                                Thanks so much Thad for the review and kind understanding words they are most appreciated

                              • Goldfinch60

                                AI has become the ruination of mankind soren, we just do not talk to each other in person anymore.

                                Andy

                                • sorenbarrett

                                  Yes Andy and unfortunately I believe this is just the begining, it seems that we have traded our human birthright for a bowl of comfort porridge. Thanks so much for the read and kind understanding words

                                • Tom Dylan

                                  An intriguing poem, Soren. Some great imagery.

                                  • sorenbarrett

                                    Thanks so much Tom for the read and comment it is appreciated

                                  • RSM0812

                                    This was a great read. You write some beautiful stuff. I'd be pleased if I had as much talent.

                                    • sorenbarrett

                                      I thank you so much for your read and most kind words.



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