You can be sure
I am stored
Behind your kidneys'
Water doors
Open them too wide
Body going dry
The fires of passion
Evaporation
Who's inhaling
The smoke?
Maybe you don't wanna know
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Mutley Ravishes (
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Ah the metaphor in this one goes deeper than the kidneys. Yes indeed who is inhaling the smoke?
It sure does! And I wasn’t intending to leave the physical kidneys completely out of the picture.
Thanks for dropping by.
I am.
Haha! Well, yes. Along with some “uninvited” guests.
There's no Canaanite behind the wall.
That's an intriguing reply! I don't understand.....
It's probably me, enjoyed the read
Well, perhaps it depends on who we think this “me” is?!
The last line makes it sound like we might already know. A well-written metaphor that goes far deeper than the human renal system. And I love the fact that "inhaling" is used along with kidneys. Inhaling = lungs not kidneys...yet it makes perfect sense because the inhalation of smoke doesn't just kill the lungs, now does it? The body is all connected. Again, brilliant metaphor, my friend.
Thanks for commenting. I enjoy your takes on the rhymes, helping me to see things from a different, often unseen angle. It's much appreciated!
Yes, we might already know and avoid facing up to it. Maybe because we're not ready to see and deal with it. Am I ready? Well, not for the Minotaur! One day at a time....
Indeed. Not sure I am ready for the Minotaur, either. Whew, I barely survived what I believe was a sinus infection. All jokes aside, you are most welcome, my friend! One day at a time indeed!
It would is inevitable, it would seem. 🙏🏻🕊️
I just can't work out your comment. I'm intrigued
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