A loud bang kaboomed.
I awoke to the Spring sun
With a fast heartbeat.
The sleep in my eyes
Felt like painful, crusted dreams
As voices spoke loud.
The early spring morn’,
Including the confusion,
Caused me to chuckle.
In a bleary cry,
I called out with, “What the hell!?
You’re being real loud”.
As a smile came to my face,
Another loud sound arose.
I hopped up off of my damn bed
And fell down a rabbit hole,
Certain at the end I’d be dead.
Instead, the fall slowed to a stroll.
I was down looking right on up
The long and twisted rabbit hole.
After sitting, I saw a cup
With tea and scones, and a strange man;
I was there, down, looking right up,
Beyond him—a cake in a pan
That said, “eat me,” and so I did
With tea, growing to a large man;
Now, I could see across the grid,
And I saw the girl of my dreams,
And a vile to drink; that I did.
It took me to that girl, who screams,—
I wish I were still in my bed,
An axe this queen had in my dreams—
“Off with his head!” Shit, I am dead.
© 2025 Tristan Robert Lange. All rights reserved.
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Alice in wonderland was one of my favorites as a child and continues to hold a lot of charm. Through the looking glass and Lewis Carrol's the hunting of the Snark. Here there are continual references to Alice. Loved your ending that resolved the rest of this poem. Very nice Tristan
Thank you, my friend. Glad it delivered! Your time and feedback are much appreciated! 🙏❤️
It takes imagination to read your poems and even then like this one you visually craft for your audience… good stuff
Thank you, bro! Much appreciated! I am glad that it delivered and you found the imaginative imagery to work. ❤️🙏
Good write T, and a pic of KP too? lol.
Thank you, Orchi! 🤣 Yikes, did you throw away the fishing line? I guess not in time! 😜 All daftness aside, thank you so much my friend. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Although it might be a bit of a cliché, without wanting to sound like a stuck record, you are on form .. top form mate .. well done You .. Kindest Regards, Me 😎👍
While some cliche's suck, I'll take that one every time...unless, by "on form", you are meaning that I am being my normal dopey self! Even then, I'll take it! 🤣 All jokes aside, thank you, my friend! Your encouragement keeps me inspired. ❤️🙏
Your rabbit hole sure is different than in the story
Indeed...I am not Alice, as it were! 🤣 Thank you for taking the dive in with me my friend, as well as for engaging; I do hope it proved to be worth it! ❤️🙏
It did, as per usual!
Awww. Thank you, my dear friend! ❤️🙏🤗
Loved the imagery in this one great read, the picture took me back to being married!!!
Thank you my friend! I am laughing at you saying that because that is straight out of where this poem came from! Sigh. A wonderland indeed! Glad that the imagery delivered and that you enjoyed it., Much appreciated, my friend! ❤️🙏
You are very welcome
Alice in the netherworld. Even my squirrels are polite to traffic since I begged them to be careful after seeing a squashed one. Ah, Tristan. Charmingly rendered with exquisite imagery and a damning poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
Yay! So glad that it delivered! And I am glad that the squirrels are on starting to be on their best behavior. They sure can be squirrely sometimes! 🤣 Thank you, Missy, for reading and for your comment. Always appreciated, my friend! ❤️🙏
Very Lewis Carroll! Surreal imagery often works well in poetry!
Indeed, it does. Thank you so much, my friend. I did want to evoke Lewis Carrol when I went into writing it and was hoping the form and the imagery would pull that off. Thank you so much for the affirmation, my friend, and for the read! Glad it delivered! ❤️🙏
Twinkle, twinkle, little bat!
That was a fun (and challenging) read.
🤣 I am glad that you enjoyed it my friend and that the challenge was a fun one, otherwise, I'd owe you one for the torture! 😜 All jokes aside, I truly appreciate your time and feedback and I am glad that the poem delivered. Much appreciated, my friend! ❤️🙏
I always found the Queen in Alice and Wonderland really scary. She is just as scary in your poem Tristan. The tea and scones sound delightful though. Loved the references to Alice in Wonderland. Have a happy Thursday dear poet.
Me too, and no trip through wonderland is complete, frighteningly, without her! 🤣 Thank you, dear poet and friend, I am glad the imagery and the Alice and Wonderland references came through, even the mean queen herself. Your time, thoughts, and well wishes are a blessing to me this morning. I hope your Thursday is a brilliant one, Cassie! 🙏❤️
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