My eyes looking down at my love,
Her loving gaze meeting mine—
Such innocence and warm desire—
My eyes looking at my lover
With electrifying tingles.
My darling’s arms around me—
Pure innocence and hot desire—
My eyes gazing at my lover
As her hands caress my neck.
Pins, needles and tingles with
My flower’s arms around me,
My eyes study my lover’s
Sexy and supple, hot desire
As her fingers trace my neck.
With both hands on two tight ropes—
Titillating tingles as
My flower’s arms embrace me—
My eyes worship her lovely,
Curvaceous, supple, hot desire
As her fingers soothe my neck.
Green garden surrounds our swing—
Both hands firmly on its tight ropes—
Exhilarating tingles
From my love’s hugging embrace
And her sexy, supple desire—
Her fingers massaging my neck—
While my eyes are adoration.
Golden light streams down through green,
Tall trees surrounding our swing.
Electric, teasing tingles
From my dear’s sensual embrace
And her soft, supple breasts—
Her two hands gripping my neck—
While my adoration eyes
Meet her deep and loving gaze.
© 2025 Tristan Robert Lange. All rights reserved.
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Tristan Robert Lange (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Form: Revelatory Cascade. A response to a challenge presented by fellow poet and friend, Cassie, this poem is the ninth poem written in my original Revelatory Cascade form and is an ekphrasis of the 1873 painting “Springtime” by French artist Pierre Auguste Cot, currently held in the collection of the Metropolitan Museum of Art, in New York City, NY. This poem is also connected to my poem, “Swingers Springtime Surprise”.
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Romantic, sensuous, erotic and loving. A most lovely love poem.
Thank you, Soren. Cassie challenged, I had to oblige...especially since I am so known for my love poems. 🤣 I am glad this delivered, even though it is not exactly my wheelhouse. Much appreciated, my friend ❤️🙏
Excellent write Tristan
Thank you, Tony! Much appreciated! ❤️🙏
You're welcome
Not sure i am old enough to read things like this!!!,very sensual and loving and enjoyable
🤣 Thank you my friend. Glad it delivered, and that you found it enjoyable and not dreadful. 🙏❤️
Your are very welcome
Ahh, glad you got time for 'tingles' though - hopefully! heehee.
🤣 Well, the loverboy in the painting got the tingles...as for me, I'm a lost cause! 🤪 But hey, either way...better than the shingles! So...there's that. 🤷♂️ Thank you, Orchi! Much appreciated, my friend! ❤️🙏
Oh no!! No tingles for you? Can't be doing without them. heehee.
Ticks all the write boxes for me .. and if I was you Tristan I would be feeling mighty pleased with myself and my pen had I poemed such a gem in a model of my own making .. I subsequently and unashamedly tug my forelock sir .. Neville
Well, thank you Neville! Much appreciated, my dear friend! Indeed, I am feeling good about this one. Your words of encouragement mean a lot! ❤️🙏
Well done you Tristan. The first time I think I have challenged a poet about a particular subject, and probably the last 🙂 The painting by Pierre Auguste Cot, is beautiful. You have certainly achieved, as your earlier poem ending in a most sinister way. Now this has been penned in a most loving and sensual style without a trace of dark or sinister in which you excel. I enjoyed and appreciate this lovely composition and thank you kindly for taking up and delivering the challenge. All good wishes.
I am most humbled, Cassie. I do like a good challenge and I had been thinking about writing a love poem with my new form, so it was serendipitous. I am really glad the poem delivered and that you enjoyed it. Thank you for challenging me, my friend. Glad you did. ❤️🙏
Still think it's Lust rather than Love........ if my memory serves me right....😅😂
Indeed...In the heat of things, its so hard to tell the difference! 🤣 Thanks for reading, Dave! Much appreciated.
Whoa! You literally had me reeling thanks to using the same image yet paring it so deliciously with a more apt delineation than initially. Cull a low whistle, will you?! Well. Gorgeously rendered with superb imagery and an exquisite poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
Yeah. Cassie challenged, I obliged. I had been wanting to try out a love poem with my new form and Cassie's challenge set up the perfect opportunity to take this same picture and go the opposite and more traditional way with it. Being that this is a bit outside the box for me, I am super glad it delivered and surprised in a pleasant way. Your feedback is very much appreciated my dear friend! 🐦⬛🖤🙏
An engaging and nicely expressed poem .. I liked the read .. I like how you have repeated certain words in this
Love the line ‘ my eyes are adoration.
my adoration eyes
Meet her deep and loving gaze.
A lovely poem
Thank you, my friend. I am so glad it delivered and that the repetition worked. Thank you so much for your feedback!
That’s ok .. your welcome
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