Life, with fingers of light, holds a tight grip on all
Death's dark breath hides in the shadows of the fall
Sun turns his face, in disgrace, covering his ears to a siren song
A winter call in night's shawl, a shade to take me along
Thanatos, gentle be when you take me on that journey back home
Night is cold and stabs through shirt fold, as a dagger of gloam
Nothing said but with nod of head, motioning the way
A wish to delay but one more day, but the shade his course would not stay
Barefoot over cold stone, past graves once known wanderers in the dark
He set his way toward the end of day, to my voice he would not hark
In musty air that did share the wilted odor of once youthful blooms
Petals that fell, whisper stories that tell, of past, echoing in empty tombs
As a child did pray, then on a pillow did lay my head as in dreams I ran
When from butterfly visions I awoke in night's cloak I had the gray hairs of an old man
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Most dignified, as I've lost many loved ones at a young age I truly dig deep and reflect on death in all its glory, before 1974 I believe I was in fact dead, because I wasn't alive, I know this will make sense to you because you know me well, I don't believe we should live in fear of death, because it is a natural cycle of the gift of life, none can escape it in the end. Stunning poem my dear sorrenbarret 🌹
Thank you Teddy for the review and understanding kind words. Thanatos is supposedly the gentle taker of life while Ares takes it violently. So don't worry. Death is but a passageway and a phase no more painful than birth I'm sure.
This is a master work.So powerful and insightful.Well done mi amigo
Thank you David your words mean a great deal and highly esteemed.
Now I can’t pass up a poem where “gloom” features quite effectively 🙏🏻🕊
Thanks Cryptic yes gloom or gloam all the same. Appreciate the read and comment my friend.
Auto correct done me in again: “gloam” this instance 🙏🏻🕊️
A very powerful writ around the visitor of death, I wouldn't mind which way i die violent or gentle, just as long as its quick, great write
Thank you T for the read and comment it is always appreciated
You are very welcome
This theme is just so foreign to me, I am not sure what to say. 🤷♂️🤣 All kidding aside, well done on this, Soren. This, my friend, is a poignant meditation on mortality, with vivid imagery that contrasts light and darkness. Mortality and the swift passage of time are well thought out in this piece. I love how you've captured life’s brevity so creatively, where a single night’s sleep transforms a child into an old man. Hauntingly beautiful poetic exposé on one of the most universal experiences to not just humanity, but all of life. Well done. 🌹👏
Thank you Tristan your comments are most valuable. Yes we all want to keep the messenger far from our door but inevitably he will knock some day and in the passage of time it all seems as a dream
Indeed. You are most welcome, my friend!
Be careful what you wish for .. is something my parents taught me long ago & I am still a great believer in .. not because I am either this or that .. but because I don't think it's a good idea to put all my eggs in the same frying pan .. Still very muchly enjoyed .. Neville
No need to wish for death and taxes they just happen to all mate. Thanks so much Neville for your read and comment they are always most appreciated.
Tremendous work. Powerful and poignant.
Thank you Thomas appreciate the read and comment
A daft comment - I wanted the No.11 bus to Torremolinos but caught the No.7 bus to Thanatos by mistake. Doh! lol.
Oh yes the one that goes by the river Styx. Thanks Orchi for the read and support
Felt this one deeply. Very powerful
Thank you Shamrocker your read and comments are always so welcome
Good write, SB. Death is uninvited even though we know it will come to the party.
Thanks so much Jerry no I guess that we would not send any invitations to him but still invited or not he comes when he wants. Thanks so much for the read and comment
Here's a text that speaks to me !
Thanks Lorenz I appreciate the read and the comment. Have a great day
great write.
Thank you so much for reading this poem your comments are always appreciated
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