The sweet perfumed smell of baked hell
Under its spell, served with broken teeth on an oyster shell
The cook disgraced, a plate of vomitus pungent paste
Sour love has a bitter taste, with a roes thorn baste
Curdled aroma, gastronomical coma, acrid taste of dreams
Taste a bug with a bite, fly soup in sight, topped with excreted creams
A spoon with a hole won't empty the bowl of pus that does pour
From a wound where it is spooned out of an draining sore
Putting back the paste would be a waste, eat it every bite
Clean off your plate before it's too late, with your mother don't fight
She'll tell you this stew is good for you, it will help you grow
One more gulp, taste the pulp down your throat it does flow
Overcooked heart a la carte swallowed with jaded drinks
Aroma drunk, can't tell it smells like a skunk, it stinks
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- Comment from author about the poem: Sometimes things are just too sweet.
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The phrasing and texture is strong and the drive is quite moving. Nice change of pace here🕊🙏🏻
Thanks Cryptic this was meant to be a strong tasting dish Orchi always says he needs more garbage.
And strong it is. As for Orchi, he should be so thrilled 🙏🏻🕊️
LOL hilarious and fantasticly pungent from the very first line to the last absurdly brilliant, I am chuckling away here, oh the very smell and torture. 🌹 One of my new favourites of yours. Loved everything about this, kudos a thousand times. 👏
Thanks Teddy I never criticize others poems it is like speaking ill of someone's child just bad taste but sometimes I eat just oo much candy and it gives me a tooth ache, so it is with all the sugary sweet treats that most people equate with poetry. Don't get me wrong I do love a good dessert from time to time but too much sugar is too much. I so appreciate your kind words of encouragement dear friend
Sounds like my 21st.Well Gordon Ramsey would have a field day here. Some powerful images of culinary delights. Well done
Thanks we cater and do fast food too. Thanks for the read David for the read. Just dump enough sugar into it and the American public love it.
I'm gonna be sick! But, ahh, the perfect foods for KP! heehee.
Told ya. Thanks Orchi appreciate the read hope you feel better soon
And how. The truth, Shakespearean style. Wonderful sonnet, friend. And I couldn't agree more. This metaphor hit home for me. 👏🌹
Every once in a while one has to dive into distaste for the sake of diversity. Thanks my friend for the read and kind words or understanding.
Indeed. It was quite the banquet. 🤣 You are most welcome, Soren!
It's more fun than a barrel of monkeys, SB. Well done.
Tired of sweet romance stories thought I would throw one in to balance the game. Thanks so much for the read Jerry your words brighten the day
I could practically taste it. Ewwwwwwww
Many have with any sour romance. Thanks so much Mina for the read and support it is highly valued
Excellent write
Thank you Tony
You're welcome
Your poem is wildly original—I've never seen romance framed with such dark, visceral imagery! Wow, what a way to go—literally! I'm not having lunch today after this read. LOL!
Thanks for the read Rodriguez I always appreciate your reads and comments. Didn't mean to spoil your appetite but I have grown a bit weary of too much sugar in the romance department so decided to put a balance to it.
No, well! Tremendous! I'm always speechless when I see your pieces. Cheers!
Thank you so much for your read and most kind comment. It is most appreciated.
Hear Hear.....
But it is just conceivable you've upset somebody........
Thanks Dave every post I do runs a greater than zero percent chance of upsetting some one and some have said that my writing is nauseating anyway. This one because I had eaten enough sugar coated and artificially sweetened romance poems that I decided to balance it out with something sour. I do appreciate your read and kind comment my friend.
Knw the feeling - and have made my position clear more than once in the past. Nice to see some action here, even if it does mean one overly sensitive soul is 'triggered'.
Great stuff, Soren.
PS: Serial offender - he will be back....... Don't loose any sleep over it...
Thanks for the warning
Superb sonnet soren, very clever phrasing on the bad things in life.
Andy
Thanks so much Andy I just knew that you would find a positive twist to this rather sour poem. I appreciate your read and always kind words of support.
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