Da drizzle of a grey day, pressure dropped ta where da temperature stopped
Da cold's got a hold on an old back, wid each bend arthritic bones crack
Fog's settlin' in, noticed some spots on ma skin, hope dem cancer ain't started again
Last time dey took em off was when Ma ad dat terrible cough,
She died last spring, can't find ma marriage ring
Think ah eard da phone ring
Don't worry a bit, Ma'll get it
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This sounds like "The Real Housewives of the Appalachians" Just kidding.An enjoyable fun accent and poem
Yes David it could well be. A line of my family came out of the hills of Tennessee and I guess I still have a thread of it in my DNA. Appreciate the read and comment my friend.
This poem breaks meโthe cold, the cancer, the ghost of 'Ma' answering a phone that never rings. Grief lives in the spaces between your words. Stunning and sorrowful.
Thank you so much Mottakeenur for your most kind and understanding review of this piece. You are right it is in the emptiness where pain resides and in what is not said that regret falls. Your words are deeply appreciated
Thank You..๐๐
Although done in an entertaining style this is a sad and touching write, the ghost of ma still holds memories and pain, nicely expressed write
Thank you Tobani yes life is a balance and there is humor in tragedy and tragedy in humor. Unfortunately we live in a polarized world where fear of offending has led to the politically correct and the over protect view. In this we loose the humor in sadness and the ability to smile even in pain.
You are very welcome
One of our fave road trip songs was Rocky Top TN; we spent some time at Gatlinburg one winter and hiked that portion of the Appalachian trail towards NC. ๐๏ธ๐๐ป
Thanks Cryptic for your review and memories distort and fade sometimes buried but seldom die.
So true Soren, you are welcome ๐๏ธ๐๐ป
Goosebumps, she certainly did lose the ring so did you! Extraordinary this one, I could literally see you running for the phone hoping it would be her, language a super kudos very very original. ๐น
Thank you so much my dear friend thought I would try something different this time. Appreciate your continued support and encouragement as always.
Wow what pain! incredible!
Thank you Damaso for your read and most understanding words. Pain becomes normal when it is routine and is not understood
You're welcome, my friend. A hug.
Good write SB. Pain also resides here, in me life with KP. Apain in the neck, that is! lol.
Got ya Orchi thanks for the read and comment yea mine is a pain in the back and I think it is bad posture.
A powerful and moving piece - raw , atmospheric and full of quiet sorrow.
Thanks so much Salvia for the read and most kind words of support they are deeply valued
Emotive words expressed so well soren.
Andy
Thanks so much Andy I deeply appreciate your reads and most encouraging words of support
sometimes some memories just tug at your heart strings - as this one does - and also reminds me of my late mom
thanks for sharing this sad but tender poem
Thank you so much Nafisa for your read and most kind words of encouragement they are most deeply appreciated
thank you for sharing these gems..Good going
Such a unique and powerful poem. A fine write.
Thank you Tom for the review and kind and supportive comment it is always appreciated
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