Words of an old man

sorenbarrett

Looks like its's gonna pour, paint peels ya might wanna close dat door
Der's a draft, did ya ear? Somethin's queer, think the wind laughed 
Ah never mind, wisht ah could unwind dis button thread, pay na attention ta what ah said
Let's have somethin ta eat come on put up yer feet, nutin like biscuits an gravy yer brother just got back from the navy.  Dead ya said? Naw Ma an Jack are nappin out back. Could ya close dat door?

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  • David Wakeling

    This is a fun accent poem. I enjoyed reading mi amigo

    • sorenbarrett

      Thank you David for the review and supportive encouraging words.

    • arqios

      ENjoyed to Fave! Felt your freedom here, Soren 🕊️🙏🏻

      • sorenbarrett

        Thank you Cryptic just playing with new things. Appreciate the read and most kind words of support

      • Poetic Licence

        It's getting drafty in here, enjoyed the read

        • sorenbarrett

          Thanks Tobani just a lot of wind. Appreciate the read and kind words my friend

          • Poetic Licence

            You are very welcome

          • Jerry Reynolds

            I have heard that song. Different accents same song.

            • sorenbarrett

              Thanks Jerry I appreciate your reading of it and your comment it is most valued

            • Friendship

              The poem masterfully embodies the resilient voice of an elderly individual, courageously embracing the complexities of daily life, memories, and the transformative power of time. It conveys a profound sense of hope and warmth, even in the face of adversity and the ominous threat of life's challenges, both literal and metaphorical. Moreover, your poem serves to underscore the vital importance of unbreakable familial bonds, the solace of a loving home, and the simple yet profound joys of life, while concurrently acknowledging the triumphs of aging and the beauty of cherished memories.
              This poem elicited profound sadness within me, resonating deeply in my heart. It's challenging to navigate a world without familial support, yet simultaneously experiencing a sense of detachment. Aging can be particularly difficult without a support system or individuals to share memories of the past.

              • sorenbarrett

                Thank you Friendship for the read and sensitive feel for the meaning of the piece. It is appreciated.

              • orchidee

                I will close dat door after I've said good write SB. lol.

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thanks Orchi your words are most appreciated

                • Kevin Hulme

                  Enjoyed. Good One.

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thank you so much Kevin for the read and comment it is most appreciated

                  • Lorenz

                    If youth could and old age knew !

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Indeed! Thanks Lorenz for the read and comment it is appreciated

                    • sunshine777

                      I can picture this vividly. Great write!

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thank you so much for the read and comment it is most appreciated

                        • sunshine777

                          Your welcome!

                        • Soman Ragavan

                          Please see my comments on the poem "The body bazaar" by • GRAY0328>
                          • THE BODY BAZAAR

                          https://mypoeticside.com/show-poem-204422
                          Soman Ragavan.

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thank you Soman I appreciate your review and reference

                          • Salvia.S

                            Nice!

                            • sorenbarrett

                              Thank you so much Salvia for the read and support it is most appreciated

                            • Teddy.15

                              lol I wonder what it may have been a bit of mystery here, how wonderful so too is this wonderful language. 🌹

                              • sorenbarrett

                                Thanks Teddy just a poem of an old man who is not what he used to be and can't keep his thoughts together after two losses that he no longer recognizes. The dialect is a back hills type from the Appalachians.



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