I am love, power of, all below and above
Creator, I'm a traitor, in form of a dove
Commanding not to kill, as my will, still I sent my son
To buy,... ransom, die for mistakes I have done
I cast down my son I cherish, to perish, in order to save man's worst
Tooth and fang on a cross to hang, satisfying human blood thirst
So bend your knee to a tree, how is this not worshiping an idol
An eye for an eye, a father homicidal, turning his cheek his son suicidal
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- Comment from author about the poem: A metaphor- are not our temporal fathers by definition our god being our literal creator that brings us into this world dooming us to the sacrifice of death? This poem came to me after reading Fyodor Dostoevsky's Brothers Karamazov and the quote "Imagine that you are creating a fabric of human destiny with the object of making men happy in the end, giving them peace and rest at last. Imagine that you are doing this but that it is essential and inevitable to torture to death only one tiny creature...in order to found that edifice on its unavenged tears. Would you consent to be the architect on those conditions? Tell me. Tell the truth." and then Dan Vasc's cover of Gethsemane
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Happy Father's Day 🙏🏻🕊️ I have a feeling perfection-imperfection dynamic is on many a mind today.
Thank you Cryptic and would wish you the same. I appreciate the read and kind words.
Many thanks. I am of the generation that wasn't fathered or taught to father but always expected to be close to perfection. LOL. if that isn't hard enough... but yeah... that's the way of things, have a pleasant one.🕊️🙏🏻
I like to think I would not consent, for me a very thought provoking write, nicely expressed and written
Thank you Tobani for your read and most understanding words they are always most appreciated and valued my friend.
You are very welcome
Wow this is a lot to think about. The good book is a bit weird if I'm honest. What father giveth his only begotten son to take away the sins of a million strangers. Sorry but it is beyond laughable. This capture the anger we have about the absurdity of the scriptures. I really enjoyed reading this it fits the atheist manifesto really well.
Thank you David for your read. Being father's day in the US and being a father myself I thought it timely. Coming from a highly religious family and having been a missionary long ago time has mellowed many of my views although I still respect those that believe fervently. I appreciate your read and understanding words of support.
So powerful my dear sorrenbarret, I guess as a mother of a child I hope that my son's dad is inspiring with all the right features, but no man is perfect. Happy father's day to you dear friend. 🌹
Dear Teddy I have missed your poetry and so good to hear from you. Thank you so much for your read and kind wishes they are deeply appreciated.
Happy Father’s Day, Soren. Quite a fitting poem/metaphor for the day. It, of course, will poke at people with fragile faiths; however, so be it. Or as Jesus would say, “Amen.” This poem is quite profound and very thought-provoking on many levels. Well done, my friend. 🌹👏
Thank you Tristan and a happy father's day to you as well. Thanks for the read and comment it is most appreciated
Thank you, Soren. You are most welcome!
Not to be facetious, but yes, He did send His Son down to the 'parish' to save us - should be 'perish'. Oops!
You got me Orchi thanks so much for the read and noted error Appreciate it
Hello Soren,
'If any question why he died. Tell them, because our fathers lied.' Kipling. Your poem reminds me of Kipling, how he sought favour for his son to go to war and as a consequence never to return. This one really provokes the mind, so, too, the soul. A profoundly powerful verse and perfectly composed. The poem should be awarded accolades galore and its author lionised. Happy Father's Day and may you have many more.
Kind regards,
Tony.
Tony your most generous comment is cherished and have made my father's day. I hesitated to post this not wanting to offend but then thought what is a poet but one that writes what they feel and let the chips fall where they may. A most happy father's day to you as well
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