Night's refuge

sorenbarrett

Sleep, peaceful gate, open wide your doors. 
At your threshold I leave shoes of sin as I enter in
I seek sanctuary on Hypnos' silent shores

 

Morpheus under glued lids, open my eyes to eternal dreams 
Where time disappears and seconds grow into years
Nature's laws do not apply and life's not what it seems

 

Life 'tis but a dream, passing in the blink of an eye
Melting shadows joys, pains, sadness gains 
Roads walked, lovers known, to erase all and die

 

By Mnemosyne's touch, to forget all of one's sins
Wiping clean the slate, in grave's sleep to wait
To start over, no regret, new life where all begins 

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  • Friendship

    Your poem "Night's Refuge" embarks on a transformative journey, exploring the rejuvenating sanctuary of sleep, the transient nature of life, and the profound desire for rebirth and redemption through the liberating power of forgetfulness. The poem illuminates the fleeting nature of existence, acknowledging the weight of sins and burdens, while suggesting that sleep (or death) offers a tranquil refuge where one can escape the pains of existence and perhaps emerge anew, unencumbered by past mistakes. Your poem masterfully employs vivid imagery, such as "Hypnos' silent shores" and "Morpheus under glued lids," to evoke the serene and dreamlike quality of sleep, crafting a mystical atmosphere that inspires and uplifts. This imagery creates a "peaceful gate," symbolizing a welcoming and protective nature, while Mnemosyne (the goddess of memory) embodies the transformative power of forgetting. To me, "Night's Refuge" is a masterpiece that utilizes rich imagery, metaphor, and a free-form structure to explore the profound themes of sleep, memory, and the cyclical nature of existence, inspiring us to reflect on the human experience.

    • sorenbarrett

      Thank you so much Friendship for your reading this poem. I wrote it in tercets with the original thought of making it a villanelle with an ABBA structure but could not find the fifth tercet and the last quatrain to complete it. So it is what it is. Your interpretation and generous words of encouragement and support are most valued

      • Friendship

        SorenBarrett, I'm really confused this morning by your poem! I had to read it several times, and now, with your reply, I'm even more confused. Did I misunderstand the poem? The poem is a bit confusing in how it's worded. I understand that you're trying to figure out the painting you're painting, but I'm lost. Could you please explain?

        • sorenbarrett

          You got the interpretation I was trying to explain its format Not free form but in stead a Villanelle Instead of quatrains that are four line stanzas a villanelle has tercets or three line stanzas that have an ABA rhyme scheme. I chose to use a variation with an ABBA rhyme sches where the center line has an internal rhyme. A Villanelle is composed of five such stanzas with a final quatrain of ABAB rhyme scheme and I was one tercet short plus the quatrain so in this sense it is not complete. Thanks for asking

          • Friendship

            SorenBarrett, Your poem is written in free verse, which means it does not adhere to a strict syllabic pattern or meter. Nonetheless, the utilization of iambic and trochaic feet creates rhythmic qualities, thereby establishing a natural flow. The varying line lengths contribute to a sense of freedom and fluidity, effectively reflecting the theme of escape. I think I got it!

            • sorenbarrett

              My misunderstanding I thought that by free verse you meant without rhyme

              • Friendship

                No problem, SorenBarrett. This was a 3-hour challenge for my brain this morning. Have a good day.🤣👍

              • Lorenz

                A vision tinged with mythology and christian esotericism .
                Journey to the realm of shadows where time no longer has any consistency .A fav .

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thank you very much Lorez for your read and most kind support and encouragement. They are most valued

                • Poetic Licence

                  A very nicely crafted write of something I don't often have, peaceful sleep, enjoyed the read

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Tobani thank you for your most kind response to this poem it is appreciated and here is wishing you peaceful nights of sleep

                    • Poetic Licence

                      You are very welcome

                    • Tristan Robert Lange

                      What a beautifully layered piece, Soren. The mythic thread woven through sleep, memory, and renewal gives this an almost sacred weight. That final stanza brings it home quietly, yet powerfully. Truly, an excellent job, my dear friend. 🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛ A fave!

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thank you so much Tristan for your read and kind words of encouragement they are as always most appreciated and valued.

                        • Tristan Robert Lange

                          You are moat welcome, my friend!

                        • Jerry Reynolds

                          A fine write, SB. Enjoyed the read.

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thank you so much Jerry for your read and most kind words I have missed you lately

                          • orchidee

                            Good write SB.

                            • sorenbarrett

                              Thank you Orchi much appreciated

                            • Nature

                              It's a good poem S. Really appreciate your efforts in making this poem and giving me an entry into the world of literature.

                              • sorenbarrett

                                Thank you Nature for your review and most kind words of support they are most appreciated

                              • Bella Shepard

                                Dreams had such a wonderful, mystical aura, before we neurologically disected them. This beautiful poem evokes a mysticism that I think we will always choose hold on to. Excellent write!

                                • sorenbarrett

                                  Thank you so much Bella despite what they say with EEG's PET scans still do not explain what dreams are or why we have them. The mysticism remains. I appreciate your review and support Bella

                                • Jeremy Leach

                                  Very well crafted and an eternally interesting topic. Reading this makes me stop and think about it all, which is good.

                                  • sorenbarrett

                                    Thank you Jeremy for your review of this piece and you most kind words of support and encouragement

                                  • Goldfinch60

                                    Fine words soren and the line "Life 'tis but a dream, passing in the blink of an eye" is so very true.

                                    Andy

                                    • sorenbarrett

                                      Thank you very much Andy for the review of this piece it is appreciated as is your support and encouragement

                                    • Neville



                                      Excellent ink my friend .. & then some .. Neville

                                      • sorenbarrett

                                        Thank you Neville for your read and kind words of encouragement they are most appreciated



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