Sleep, peaceful gate, open wide your doors.
At your threshold I leave shoes of sin as I enter in
I seek sanctuary on Hypnos' silent shores
Morpheus under glued lids, open my eyes to eternal dreams
Where time disappears and seconds grow into years
Nature's laws do not apply and life's not what it seems
Life 'tis but a dream, passing in the blink of an eye
Melting shadows joys, pains, sadness gains
Roads walked, lovers known, to erase all and die
By Mnemosyne's touch, to forget all of one's sins
Wiping clean the slate, in grave's sleep to wait
To start over, no regret, new life where all begins
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- Comment from author about the poem: Hypnos god of sleep Morpheus god of dreams Mnemosyne goddess of memory
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Your poem "Night's Refuge" embarks on a transformative journey, exploring the rejuvenating sanctuary of sleep, the transient nature of life, and the profound desire for rebirth and redemption through the liberating power of forgetfulness. The poem illuminates the fleeting nature of existence, acknowledging the weight of sins and burdens, while suggesting that sleep (or death) offers a tranquil refuge where one can escape the pains of existence and perhaps emerge anew, unencumbered by past mistakes. Your poem masterfully employs vivid imagery, such as "Hypnos' silent shores" and "Morpheus under glued lids," to evoke the serene and dreamlike quality of sleep, crafting a mystical atmosphere that inspires and uplifts. This imagery creates a "peaceful gate," symbolizing a welcoming and protective nature, while Mnemosyne (the goddess of memory) embodies the transformative power of forgetting. To me, "Night's Refuge" is a masterpiece that utilizes rich imagery, metaphor, and a free-form structure to explore the profound themes of sleep, memory, and the cyclical nature of existence, inspiring us to reflect on the human experience.
Thank you so much Friendship for your reading this poem. I wrote it in tercets with the original thought of making it a villanelle with an ABBA structure but could not find the fifth tercet and the last quatrain to complete it. So it is what it is. Your interpretation and generous words of encouragement and support are most valued
SorenBarrett, I'm really confused this morning by your poem! I had to read it several times, and now, with your reply, I'm even more confused. Did I misunderstand the poem? The poem is a bit confusing in how it's worded. I understand that you're trying to figure out the painting you're painting, but I'm lost. Could you please explain?
You got the interpretation I was trying to explain its format Not free form but in stead a Villanelle Instead of quatrains that are four line stanzas a villanelle has tercets or three line stanzas that have an ABA rhyme scheme. I chose to use a variation with an ABBA rhyme sches where the center line has an internal rhyme. A Villanelle is composed of five such stanzas with a final quatrain of ABAB rhyme scheme and I was one tercet short plus the quatrain so in this sense it is not complete. Thanks for asking
SorenBarrett, Your poem is written in free verse, which means it does not adhere to a strict syllabic pattern or meter. Nonetheless, the utilization of iambic and trochaic feet creates rhythmic qualities, thereby establishing a natural flow. The varying line lengths contribute to a sense of freedom and fluidity, effectively reflecting the theme of escape. I think I got it!
My misunderstanding I thought that by free verse you meant without rhyme
No problem, SorenBarrett. This was a 3-hour challenge for my brain this morning. Have a good day.🤣👍
A vision tinged with mythology and christian esotericism .
Journey to the realm of shadows where time no longer has any consistency .A fav .
Thank you very much Lorez for your read and most kind support and encouragement. They are most valued
A very nicely crafted write of something I don't often have, peaceful sleep, enjoyed the read
Tobani thank you for your most kind response to this poem it is appreciated and here is wishing you peaceful nights of sleep
You are very welcome
What a beautifully layered piece, Soren. The mythic thread woven through sleep, memory, and renewal gives this an almost sacred weight. That final stanza brings it home quietly, yet powerfully. Truly, an excellent job, my dear friend. 🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ A fave!
Thank you so much Tristan for your read and kind words of encouragement they are as always most appreciated and valued.
You are moat welcome, my friend!
A fine write, SB. Enjoyed the read.
Thank you so much Jerry for your read and most kind words I have missed you lately
Good write SB.
Thank you Orchi much appreciated
It's a good poem S. Really appreciate your efforts in making this poem and giving me an entry into the world of literature.
Thank you Nature for your review and most kind words of support they are most appreciated
Dreams had such a wonderful, mystical aura, before we neurologically disected them. This beautiful poem evokes a mysticism that I think we will always choose hold on to. Excellent write!
Thank you so much Bella despite what they say with EEG's PET scans still do not explain what dreams are or why we have them. The mysticism remains. I appreciate your review and support Bella
Very well crafted and an eternally interesting topic. Reading this makes me stop and think about it all, which is good.
Thank you Jeremy for your review of this piece and you most kind words of support and encouragement
Fine words soren and the line "Life 'tis but a dream, passing in the blink of an eye" is so very true.
Andy
Thank you very much Andy for the review of this piece it is appreciated as is your support and encouragement
Excellent ink my friend .. & then some .. Neville
Thank you Neville for your read and kind words of encouragement they are most appreciated
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