Notice of absence from Poetic Licence
Those who still deny.
Open your eyes.
Those who still deny.
Open your eyes.
Masking.
Creeping shadows masking mirrored reflection
Hidden feelings buried amongst the confused debris.
Willing eyes complete manufactured deception.
Tobani June 2025.
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Tobani / Nataiella (Pseudonym) (
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I find that the lighting in a powder room, boudoir, dressing room can be very affective of how we see ourselves, of course there is a link, bridge, and double meaning there as well... self-image and public projection are very sensitive matters. Moving read, here! 🕊️🙏🏻
Thank you for your kind feedback, very much appreciated
You're welcome friend🕊️🙏🏻
I think here you have shown me how a senryu works better in Japanese than English it all has to do with characters rather than letters. Just a thought in that I don't know Japanese. Nicely done Tobani
Now you have me puzzled, I don't know japanese either, so don't really understand, enjoy the rest of your
The beautiful thing about the Senryu form is that, in its brevity when done right, it speaks for itself. This does just that my friend. Well done! 🌹👏🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
Thank you for your feedback, enjoy the rest of your day
Well worded......
Thank you, enjoy the rest of your day
A lot hides in those three lines, Tobani. Well done.
Thank you Jerry for feedback, enjoy the rest of your day
Okay, I kinda understand the poem, but on the other hand, I kind of don't, so could you explain something to me? You wrote the word 'masking' and in parentheses (Senryu), so I had to look it up to see what it meant. Adding this to the poem made it seem like something else! Cause I was reading other people's comments, and the only two that were kinda on point were Sorenbarrett and Tristan Robert Lange. Their comments would be correct to me about this poem. I'm lost, but whatever it is, I hope your day gets better.
My day is fine thank you, I meant masking as in hiding my reflection in the mirror, not sure if that helps or not, enjoy the rest of your day
Thank you, Okay, I understand, now,
You are very welcome
The cruel truth is many times caught by its trap. Hopefully the wise words warn us on time on the path. Thank you very much for sharing it. Kind regards
Thank you for your feedback, have a great week
Nah. The eyes are the windows to the soul, which is precisely the reason so many souls insist and demand the "right" to wear sunglasses even indoors. There's little or no other means to hide the windows otherwise. This is likewise the reason our Secret Service is known to search the eyes of everyone, while themselves hide behind sunglasses. "Oh the tangled web we weave when first we practice to deceive "! Beautifully rendered in brevity with excellent imagery and a necessarily haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
It is so true you can tell so much by looking into someone's eyes, thank you for your kind words, very much appreciated
Precisely. You're welcome, my pleasure.
Excellent write
Thank you
You're welcome
Strictly speaking, this is something else .. but hey, who's counting .. and I love it even more for all its understated excesses .. tis brill PL .. and no kidding, write on .. Neville
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Quite a lot said in three lines. Good one.
Thank you
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