Love too strong to endure a physical bond
Temporal, it won't last long, it must be carried beyond
So with surging passion, mistaken for deep compassion
A knife he did fashion, their days to ration
Each with hand in glove, spoke of, undying love
Both Looking above, with resolve the blade they did shove
Piercing each a beating heart, a profane world to depart
With death's now immortal start, never more they'll be apart
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Love sure can be toxic, and yet the word love doesn't convey this.
Probably why the end is eternal. Like it.
Thank you so much Paul fort your read and take on this poem it is most appreciated. Yes I think it is because we confuse love with too many other things in the English and Latin based languages. It is a hodgepodge of everything from sex to God and no differentiation.
Good write SB. A dark joke - Suicide? Ooh no, it'll be bad for me health!' Heehee.
You always make me laugh adding years to this old bag of bones, don't know whether to thank you or curse the added years. Thanks for the read my friend
And in a TV programme: 'How young are you?!' Ooh, and suicide: 'No thanks, it'll hurt'. Or 'Could I try it again if I don't like it the first time?' Enough! says Fido. lol.
Brilliant poem as always! I think myself that love is like a rashomond effect in that it means different things to different people depending on your perspective to the reader this love may same intense but to others including the characters you have wrote it will be understandable!
Great write!
Thank you for your understanding and interpretation it is deeply appreciated. Yes euthanasia is a complicated subject with many facets to be considered. One should have dominion over their own life but how it affects others needs to be considered. One's beliefs enter in as many martyrs know.
Interesting choice in font
Thank you Demar thought I would make it romantic. Your read is most appreciated
It hits like a teain in full speed. Displaces thoughts, yet slows down one to immerse him into a contemplative silence.
Thank you my friend for your review and words of encouragement on a highly controversial subject. It is most appreciated
Pardon me, I take shelter in poetey for things which I can't express in verbosity. To me, a poem grappling with controversial or taboo theme is as natural as my breath. In reality we should have more like this.
A long long time ago I read Intimacy by Jean Paul Satre where he took out the layers of our inner selves to expose what was within. Your poem is dangerously close to it or Time of Desecration by Alberto Moravia.
One has to admit it's a great work. On several reads it exposes what the want of being loved and the want to be able to love feel like- their inevitable desire of impermanence.
Apologies for any factual mistakes.
Pardon me, I take shelter in poetey for things which I can't express in verbosity. To me, a poem grappling with controversial or taboo theme is as natural as my breath. In reality we should have more like this.
A long long time ago I read Intimacy by Jean Paul Satre where he took out the layers of our inner selves to expose what was within. Your poem is dangerously close to it or Time of Desecration by Alberto Moravia.
One has to admit it's a great work. On several reads it exposes what the want of being loved and the want to be able to love feel like- their inevitable desire of impermanence.
Apologies for any factual mistakes.
Thank you so much for the read and support. I too love this aspect of poetry where the difficult can be discussed but am aware that there are those whose sensitivity is offended by such. Your words are deeply valued and highly esteemed. I thank you for your encouragement
As you well know, one of my favourite subjects, and yes I can never make head not tail of it either because each soul has their own definition 🌹 wonderful dearest sorrenbarret 🌹
Thank you my friend for your review and kind words of support they are always valued
Well written, the poem explores the theme of love as an intense, often destructive force that can transcend the physical realm, leading to a tragic union in death. It suggests that the strength of their emotional bond drives the lovers to take extreme measures to remain together, viewing death as a means of escaping a world they deem profane. Yet the poet addresses the topic of suicide in the context of a romantic relationship, highlighting how love can lead individuals to make irreversible decisions. It reflects on the pain of separation and the desire for eternal unity, even at the cost of life. The complexities of love and the pain of separation can lead to desperate actions.
Thank you Friendship for the review of this piece and yes you are right in all of those things. It invites the reader to deliberate about what justifies the taking of live. Your interpretation and words are most appreciated my friend
Loves a strange old bird. The Intensity can be frightening. Good one.
Thank you Kevin for your read and understanding of this piece your comments are most appreciated.
The rhyme scheme of this is complicated and artistic in style. It beckons sadness yet companionship. I enjoyed, very much.
Thank you so much for your review and comment that is deeply valued and cherrished
Reminds me of Romeo and Juliet, a love story never to be resolved... Well done, dear friend.
A common theme in literature and even movies. Thank you so much for the read and kind words of encouragement they are most appreciated
Of course!
This is dark and devastating, my friend…passion mistaken for compassion, love bound in the same thrust of the blade. It reads like a dreadful ballad, and it stays with you. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️Very well done, Soren!
Thank you Tristan for the read and comment it is as always most appreciated my friend
Those truly in love will be one at there demise soren. Fine words.
Andy
Thanks so much for the read my friend your words are always most appreciated
A powerful poem that flows wonderfully. A fine write.
Thank you Tom for your read and kind words they are always appreciated
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