Near sighted

sorenbarrett

Distracted by a white picket fence, thought painted home my defense
An ideal love with children there, growing green grass not a care
While all around the world turns, people die while peace burns
Under a blackened sky, I turn a closed myopic eye

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  • Neville


    How extraordinarily short-sighted .. and it's happening right under all of our very noses .. shame on them .. Neville 👍😎👍

    • sorenbarrett

      Thank you Neville for the read and understanding words they are deeply appreciated

    • Friendship

      A unique style of writing that expresses a lot of emotional feelings, yet is concise and to the point. Your poem explores the theme of awareness and empowerment in the face of global suffering and conflict, inspiring us to take action. It contrasts the idyllic imagery of a peaceful, domestic life—symbolized by the “white picket fence” and “painted home”—with the harsh realities of the world, where “people die while peace burns,” urging us to make a difference. The subject matter reflects a tension between the speaker's personal desires for a tranquil existence and the darker truths of societal issues that they choose to address, motivating us to create positive change.

      • sorenbarrett

        Thank you so much Friendship for the review and interpretation. It is too bad that our personal wants and dreams blind us to what is going on.

        • Friendship

          You're very welcome, my friend. So true, it happens to us all.👍

        • Lorenz

          I dream of the little house on Pitcairn island !

          • sorenbarrett

            May that dream be fulfilled

            • Lorenz

              The next euromillion hopefully ...

            • Thomas W Case

              Brilliant imagery.

              • sorenbarrett

                Thank you Thomas your words of encouragement are most appreciated

              • Paul Bell

                That's the way it is today, we all ignore the world in case it sues us.
                Mind you, I think the white picket fence has been replaced with the 6 foot fence now.

                • sorenbarrett

                  Yes you are so right. Thanks so much for the read and comment it is most appreciated

                • Poetic Licence

                  Describes a shameful picture, how we stand and watch, to me it is so sad.

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thank you so much Tobani your read is most appreciated

                  • arqios

                    Reminds me of that Rupert Holmes song. But this poem is of much more depth and reach🕊️🙏🏻

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thanks my friend for the read and most kind words, they are appreciated

                      • arqios

                        Most welcome, Soren🕊️🙏🏻

                      • RSM0812

                        I love the wording you used with myopic. Nicely done for sure.

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thank you so much for your review and most kind words. They are most encouraging and are appreciated

                        • NinjaGirl

                          I'd say people would rather have an amazing life for themselves than a mediocre life for everyone...not on purpose per se, but that's the way the world seems to turn. Well-written description.

                        • Goldfinch60

                          That fence will protect your home from all evil soren.

                          Andy

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thank you Andy our thoughts generally do give us from evil, at least any that we would create.

                          • NafisaSB

                            Agree with you here. It’s what’s happening all around us 🤔we have become immune to other people’s suffering 🥲

                            • sorenbarrett

                              Thank you so much for your read and comment it is deeply appreciated

                            • Tristan Robert Lange

                              Soren, this is piercing truth wrapped in quiet rhyme...the dream of home shadowed by the cost of looking away. You turned privilege into poetry, and it hits hard. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

                              • sorenbarrett

                                Thank you my friend for the kind words of support and encouragement they are appreciated as always.

                              • GenXer Shamrocker ☘️

                                Always capturing my complete attention! Great write my friend!

                                • sorenbarrett

                                  Thank you so much for the read and kind words of encouragement they are appreciated

                                • rebellion_in_sanity

                                  "thought painted home my defense" an absolute masterstroke by a true master

                                  • sorenbarrett

                                    Thank you my friend again you are too kind but much appreciated



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