Dreams of gold stuck in our throat, on ethereal images we gloat
Power, wealth, courage sublime, a paradise in another time
Glued in our chair or lying in bed, we inventory the lies created in our head
A coat of paint over reality, a painted room of what could be
Give yourself a kick in the ass, pick up those dreamed of balls of brass
Pour that foundation of imagination, turn vision's smoke into creation
Build walls of wealth, a roof of power, floors of courage a paradise in flower
The ground is cleared, the plan in place, contractor of desire will set the pace
With limited funds it starts with a nail, with a single blow you can not fail
All it takes is sweat, to build a mansion you have to get wet
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I like how this poem flips daydreaming into a call to action and the shift from “painted rooms” of fantasy to hammering nails and sweating for results really lands. The construction imagery makes ambition feel tangible, like you’re literally building your own future brick by brick. 🙏🕊️
Thank you my friend for your review and comment. Yes too many that lay in bed dreaming of fantasy that they could attain if willing to do the work. All okay until they start to complain that they don't have enough. Appreciate your words Cryptic
Man is a fantastic beast when he puts his mind to it.
I always think big is the way to go, and god does love a trier.
Mind you, I can never find the tools I want for the job, and as for the nails, where do they hide.
Thank you Paul for the read and kind words of encouragement they are most important to me. The nails can be pulled from old boards, found in the street or at other construction sites or if fortunate enough purchased.
Erm, I built a mansion but am still wet sometimes. I forgot to add a roof. Doh! lol.
Thanks Orchi appreciate your read and sorry about the roof. At least you get a lot of fresh air.
That is very positive right, reminded me of an old teacher who stand and lecture us with things like this, enjoyed the read
Thanks Tobani I appreciate the read and understanding. I love dreaming myself and have no problem with it. If one is satisfied with the dream great but to make it real it takes a little elbow grease.
Absolutely
Soren, this is grounded inspiration done right. No fluff...just the call to move, build, and sweat the dream into being. Honest work in poetic form, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
A pet peeve that had to out. Thanks Tristan for the read and kind words of support they are always appreciated
Well-written, your poem explores the theme of procrastination throughout.
Thank you Friendship for your read and interpretation it is most appreciated and highly valued my friend
You are most welcome, my friend
Life starts from so little but can be built into a loving life with honour, respect and love..
Andy
Thank you Andy, all it takes is a little effort.
I was going to congratulate you for pointing the finger of truth at the youth of today .. but realised in my advancing years that I am fast becoming a grumpy old man because, in truth, I know that ever since man first crawled out of his cave, there have always been the doers and get up and goers .. and those who do as little as they can possibly get away with .. Made me think no end mate .. and that can't be a bad thing .. maybe .. Neville 😎⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐👍
Thank you Neville for the read yes I hate to point because four fingers are pointed back at me. I have noting against dreamers if they are content with their dreams it is those that feel entitled to more and are not willing to work for it that rial me. I appreciate your comment and wish you a wonderful week end.
Full of imagery and advice. I thouroughly enjoyed this.
Thank you so much for your read and kind words of support they are appreciated
paralysis of desire...ambition is labour .. a beautiful motivational poem
Thank you so much for the read and encouragement it is most appreciated
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Thank you so much for your read and review it is most appreciated
You're Welcome!!!!!!
You're Welcome!!!!!!
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