Sleep

sorenbarrett

A drowsy fog covers a lazy sun's eye
that dreams in dim shadows of a closed sky
Rolling rain paints in transparent tears of pain
nature's slumber, that upon awakening leaves no stain

 

Through rents in frayed sheets that it is shedding
dingy clouds make up its soiled bedding
Cover's tattered, wrinkles part, torn clouds fall away
revealing the bare skin of a naked arising day

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  • orchidee

    Good write SB.

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks so much Orchi

    • Paul Bell

      Nature like us all takes it time in the morning.
      And maybe the old man takes the same time, but time has caught up on him.
      Got that Monday feeling.

      • sorenbarrett

        Thanks so much Paul for the read and comment. Yes there are those days.

      • Tristan Robert Lange

        My friend, this reminds me of those mornings where everything feels muted before the light breaks through. You captured that quiet shift so well. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

        • sorenbarrett

          Thank you so much my friend I appreciate your review and most kind words.

          • Tristan Robert Lange

            You are most welcome, Soren!

          • Lorenz

            I perceive the majestious musicality of the poem .

            • sorenbarrett

              Thank you Lorenz for your kind words. They are most appreciated

            • orchidee

              And now for my highly inspired poem title, all thanks to you: 'Awake'! lol.
              Well, it is Advent soon, and hymns such as 'Awake, awake, fling off the (spiritual) night' You flinging it off there?! lol.

              • sorenbarrett

                Thank you Orchi for the read and seasonal reminder it is most appreciated

              • arqios

                Waking is such salty sorrow, when the dream is cut short and the pressing order of the day begins. But the lure of the new and unknown promise is also quite tempting.

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thank you my friend for you review and most poetic response it is deeply appreciated

                  • arqios

                    Most welcome dear Soren🙏🏻🕊️

                  • Vipassana

                    Nice images, especially: revealing the bare skin of a naked arising day

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thanks so much for the review and kind words of support they are most appreciated

                    • Goldfinch60

                      Each naked day we arise is a good day as it is one more day in our lives soren.

                      Andy

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thank you so much Andy. Yes and they just keep coming.

                      • Keyara S Trotman

                        Dearest Soren, this is so sleek, shaky, as for the picture you gave and your words of choosing. My favorite is the start when you

                        “A drowsy fog covers a lazy sun's eye
                        that dreams in dim shadows of a closed sky
                        Rolling rain paints in transparent tears of pain
                        nature's slumber, that upon awakening leaves no stain”
                        Lovely write, I enjoyed it so much. It’s as if you’ve gotten the ocean quite sprung 🥂❤️

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thank you Keyara for the read and kind words of support they are most appreciated

                          • Keyara S Trotman

                            Your welcome Dearest Soren ❤️🥂



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