A drowsy fog covers a lazy sun's eye
that dreams in dim shadows of a closed sky
Rolling rain paints in transparent tears of pain
nature's slumber, that upon awakening leaves no stain
Through rents in frayed sheets that it is shedding
dingy clouds make up its soiled bedding
Cover's tattered, wrinkles part, torn clouds fall away
revealing the bare skin of a naked arising day
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Good write SB.
Thanks so much Orchi
nature's slumber is so beautiful, the renewal is so bountiful... poem captures both.
Thank you Aman your review captures the essence of this poem and is deeply appreciated. I value the comments of a poet of your stature.
Nature like us all takes it time in the morning.
And maybe the old man takes the same time, but time has caught up on him.
Got that Monday feeling.
Thanks so much Paul for the read and comment. Yes there are those days.
My friend, this reminds me of those mornings where everything feels muted before the light breaks through. You captured that quiet shift so well. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
Thank you so much my friend I appreciate your review and most kind words.
You are most welcome, Soren!
I perceive the majestious musicality of the poem .
Thank you Lorenz for your kind words. They are most appreciated
And now for my highly inspired poem title, all thanks to you: 'Awake'! lol.
Well, it is Advent soon, and hymns such as 'Awake, awake, fling off the (spiritual) night' You flinging it off there?! lol.
Thank you Orchi for the read and seasonal reminder it is most appreciated
Waking is such salty sorrow, when the dream is cut short and the pressing order of the day begins. But the lure of the new and unknown promise is also quite tempting.
Thank you my friend for you review and most poetic response it is deeply appreciated
Most welcome dear Soren🙏🏻🕊️
Nice images, especially: revealing the bare skin of a naked arising day
Thanks so much for the review and kind words of support they are most appreciated
Each naked day we arise is a good day as it is one more day in our lives soren.
Andy
Thank you so much Andy. Yes and they just keep coming.
Dearest Soren, this is so sleek, shaky, as for the picture you gave and your words of choosing. My favorite is the start when you
“A drowsy fog covers a lazy sun's eye
that dreams in dim shadows of a closed sky
Rolling rain paints in transparent tears of pain
nature's slumber, that upon awakening leaves no stain”
Lovely write, I enjoyed it so much. It’s as if you’ve gotten the ocean quite sprung 🥂❤️
Thank you Keyara for the read and kind words of support they are most appreciated
Your welcome Dearest Soren ❤️🥂
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