The gardener

sorenbarrett

He waddles with boots to his knees, a man of whale like girth
He steps as if blown by the breeze, a disposition of sunshine mirth
As dependable as the sun risen from hillside bed
His shadow's length shrinks as day does run, until sky and skin are red
Fingers tobacco stained, in his pocket a cigarette rolled in a corn husk
From his brow sweat rained, hanging from his lip a smoking glow til dusk

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  • orchidee

    Good write SB. A real 'character', a sort of 'distinguished' personage.

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks so much Orchi I appreciate the read my friend yes this one may be taken quite literally in that it is a description of a gardener I have had.

    • David Wakeling

      What a wonderful image created here.I can see the gardener. Well constructed poem.The rhyme is amazing.In fsct I see my Grandfather.That's how clever this piece is.

      • sorenbarrett

        You are very kind David and your encouragement is most appreciated my friend. Thank you for the read

      • Paul Bell

        This is me looking out to the garden, thinking.
        Someone has to do something.
        I need a bloody gardener.

        • sorenbarrett

          Thanks so much Paul. I deeply appreciate the read and dreamy comment it is so much appreciated. I was looking at the gardener yesterday ant this came to mind.

          • Paul Bell

            Send him round.

          • rebellion_in_sanity

            It is intriguing and awe inspiring to see picture drawn with words. Great write

            • sorenbarrett

              Thank you very much Rebellion your words are most appreciated

            • Rachel P

              I can picture every line you write, like a little movie in my head. Thank you for the read!

              • sorenbarrett

                Thank you so much for the read and kind words of encouragement they are most appreciated

              • Tristan Robert Lange

                Soren, this is a vivid portrait. The whale-like girth and sunshine disposition give him presence, and the shrinking shadow ties him to the arc of the day. The corn husk cigarette and sweat at dusk anchor him in lived detail. It feels both affectionate and real. Well done, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thanks so much Tristan for the review and most kind words of support. I deeply appreciate it

                  • Tristan Robert Lange

                    Most welcome, Soren. Happy Wednesday to you, my friend.

                  • Lorenz

                    I always seen gardeners as thin and non smokers ...

                    • sorenbarrett

                      I'm on the other side of the world where everything is upside down and the gardeners are fat and smoke. Thanks for the read Lorenz it is most appreciated

                      • Lorenz

                        Sometime I find its difficult to escape my quantum universe where everything is the opposite !

                      • Neville


                        Made me smile no end .. I could just make out an old sepia toned image of my great grandfather .. and so for that & the warm glow, I sincerely thank you squire .. Neville 😎👍

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thanks so much my friend for your review and kind words they are always most appreciated.

                        • hzugman

                          Great imagery. I can smell the smoke. Good job!

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thanks so much your encouragement is most appreciated

                          • Goldfinch60

                            I've probably seen that man in my past soren.

                            Andy

                            • sorenbarrett

                              Thanks so much for the read and comment Andy. Yes some figures just seem familiar and universal

                            • Kevin Hulme

                              A fine Picture painted in words .

                              • sorenbarrett

                                Thank you so much Kevin for the review and comment it is appreciated

                              • Aman 12

                                character sketch which is felt in words like a portrait.

                                • sorenbarrett

                                  Thank you so much for the read and supportive comment it is most appreciated and valued



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