I’ve been here before:
Its usage
Rotten To the core.
“We” just shot,
Waste of time, a bore-
Means nothing,
No thought to the fore.
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Author:
Doggerel Dave (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Fuller exposition of my position (like that - might use it again lol) may be found at: https://mypoeticside.com/show-poem-155649
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Things do tend to come back around, cycling all around us and within us. 🙏🏻🕊️
"Us" ain't so very clever either...😊
We can be very romantic with the one you love Dave.
Andy
.............. Oh, I see ........ Not quite the context in which I placed it this time, Andy.
Thanks for the call.
Some would deem poetry a waste of time and boring, others find it therapeutic and cleansing, some look for beauty in images while others are struck by metaphor. I love its diversity in the musicality of its structure, the cleverness of its word play, the intricacy or its rhyme scheme or just the narrative itself. But then it seems that today many are interested only in action films, video games, how much money can be made or how to change the world. Beauty is what we choose to take from something, I don't believe there is a universal measuring stick. Likewise wasting time depends upon who is counting it. A most thought provoking write Dave
Good defense and vindication of poetry, Soren - you should incorporate it into the ‘About Me’ section of your Public Profile here. Much of it I could find myself in agreement with.
However, let’s focus. Mine both here and in the previous pin I leave a link to in my comments relate to the usage of two words: ‘we’ and to a slightly lesser extent ‘us’.
Whenever you make a statement about humans/mankind’s situation, cloak it with poetic lines, scatter a plentitude of metaphor in all directions and then justify it in a ‘we’ statement you are not beginning to examine the social ills which inflict so many people or who might be doing the inflicting.
‘We’ just doesn’t cover it: there are people under oppression fighting for their rights, there are others attempting humanitarian causes, there are oppressors, the very rich and so on which are not covered by the facile use of ‘we’.
So should you be provoked into thinking about it and perhaps ‘see the light’ I for one will be glad to be free of the negativity you purvey.
Good point Dave I have been accused of being negative in the past and acknowledge that is there, I have been accused of being unrealistically positive in the past and realize that in youth was an idealist. I have taken the road of pragmatism and found that it is a dead end. Life is complex Dave and above all I have found that you can't please everyone.
Too close to bedtime. I will return...
In a previous exchange, I applied the label 'nihilist' to you which you accepted, as I recall, Soren.
Well I don't believe nihilists will be the ones to improve the world, if indeed this is at all possible.
I of course have my doubts, but retain a slim sliver of hope.....
Thanks Dave maybe our view of improvement is not the full picture (see my poem today it was written with this in mind)
Dave, this is tight and deliberate. The clipped lines give it urgency, and “We just shot” alongside “Waste of time, a bore” feels like impatience turned into poetry. It’s a focused zeroing in on your stance, and it carries conviction. Nicely done. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
Tristan, Thanks for the effort you put into your post above. In contrast to me, You radiate positivity consistently in every response you make here at MPS (you also ‘fave’ every single poem you touch).
Now while I freely admit to being totally warmed by these affirmations………......
Dave, you are most welcome. And thank you, my friend…guilty as charged. I tend to “fave” freely and respond kindly. When a poem is a personal fave, I tend to acknowledge that in my comments. My thinking is simple: sharing one’s poetry already takes enough courage without adding unnecessary shrapnel to the comment section. If that makes me the resident optimist around here, I’ll accept the sentence. I have to counterbalance my dark poetic voice somehow! 😅🤣 🖤🙏🦇🐦⬛
Got it!😅🤣 🖤🙏🦇🐦⬛
Tremendous work. Relatable.
Thanks , mate; glad you can relate.
It's started off my so-called singing - 'We'll meet again, dunno where, dunno when....' Just call me Vera (Lynn), or Sir Orchi Vera NS, spouting rubbish! lol.
Funny, I had a strong feeling in my water you would pop round the corner from somewhere, orchi. I suppose it is possible to be entirely thankful that at this stage in the proceedings you have chosen not to confound the issue by introducing the Royal 'We' into the proceedings...
Yep, you knew I would turn up like a bad......smell?.... .apple?..... penny?!
You can address Sir Orchi NS with the royal 'We'! lol.
Vera signing off now.
Vera? Vera? Is you a drag queen on Saturday nights and then go an confess yor sins on Sunday??
I am Ms Lynn in disguise. lol.
It's deja vu all over again. Thanx for the comment.
You too.
As you get older they must thinning out?
Dunno what my head of hair's got to do with it....
With a tongue like that, you wouldn't need any hair.
You are getting worse....
I know, everything back the front though...
So sorry - do the best you can, no one can ask anymore of you than that.
But when more is given, more is required.
Cuts quick, stings sharp—your words rot with truth and spit disdain.
Brevity hits like a punch; nothing wasted, everything felt.
That's the way I want it to be, Thomas. Many thanks.
When people want to be vague about an issue they use ‘we’ instead of me. They feel secure in their position and no further thought is warranted or wasted
Is this what you wanted to convey or am I completely off track🤔😱🤐
Safina, I could not criticize re your interpretation, because it represents, I believe, a pretty good picture of what must be going on in those people’s heads.. My argument is that this is wrong and begets no true debate about what is really going on.
See the link to my previous piece in my comments just below this contribution.
Thanks once more for your call👍
I AGREE WITH YOUR VIEWS. WILL CHECK OUT THE LINK ASAP..
THANKS - TAKE CARE...
................................. Ouroboros springs to mind .. but you're not the kind of dog to go around chasing its tail are ya squire 😎👍
I do appreciate the gentle hint you have gone to so much trouble to carefully provide there, Neville.
However, it is not my tail I am chasing, but all the other’s tails, no, their rear ends, in order to close down and seal off all the shit they are exuding. 😜
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