Defining Still
as patient and still
as the dark
shadows each cast
beneath the arc,
span and the reach
of outspread
sun bitterns wings ..
so perfectly
poised for the kill
and far more
patient, than any
would be
rooftop assassins
perched
up high, on some
invisible ledge
behind an invisible
screen ..
each posed with
their back to the sun
on a double
time killing spree day ..
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Author:
Neville (
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Dark shadows lay in this write. It is ominous and foreboding. Is it personal or sociopolitical reflecting the time of day we are in. I shudder. Nicely written my friend
You could be write .. and you can borrow my space blanket any time you like if it gets too nippy .. and thank you too my fiend .. Neville
Always most welcome Neville it is my pleasure my friend
Well written. The poem delves into the natural world, focusing on the sunbittern’s poised stillness as it prepares to hunt. It reflects on the predatory instinct both in animals and humans, suggesting a commentary on the nature of waiting, observation, and the act of killing, whether it be literal or metaphorical.
You are amazing .. you get me every time .. 😎🌻👍
Good write N.
great .......... ta O .. N 😎👍
Neville, the image of the sun bittern poised with wings spread for the kill really stands out. It captures that eerie balance between calm and violence in nature. Everything feels suspended in that moment of patience…right up to “a double / time killing spree day ..” Strong imagery here. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
That'll do nicely .. thanks a ton brother T .. 🖤🐦⬛🐧🖤🐈⬛😎👍
Most welcome, brother N! Hope all is well, my friend. A happy Saturday to you...shot across the great salty lake between us!
Neville, many words have been expended over time here and elsewhere in attempts to differentiate between animals and humans. There you have the essence...
(Not yer average bird of prey, BTW, when I looked.)
Bless ya bro & Google 2 by all accounts ............................................ 🐧👍
I have seen bitterns, they are magnificent birds soren. Fine words.
Andy
well thank you most kindly sir .. Neville
This has the calm, lethal patience of something wild and untouchable.
The tension builds slowly, like watching shadows wait for their moment.
Many thanks Thomas .. Neville 😎👍
one can visualize the predator waiting to strike on its prey - beautifully described
Thanks loads my friend .. Neville 😎👍
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