A king to a queen wed discovered a lover in his wife's bed
Jealousy filled heart and head, immediately to his sorcerer he fled
A fell spell to him revealed but he must keep his knowledge concealed
The lover turned into a biting fly and with each kiss he made his inamorata cry
Plaguing her days disturbing her nights, her cursing each of his loving bites
Troubled by his incessant buzz, she didn't know who he was
In fervid passion caught, the lover now fly alighted on her every spot
Enough she cried temper hot, this amorous fly with a broom I will swat
Smashed by hand or love note paper she ended his caper burning his body over her taper
But the spell would not let the lover die each time arising from flames a new fly
So night and day her lover she did slay in a never ending revengeful display
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Author:
sorenbarrett (
Offline) - Published: March 16th, 2026 02:20
- Comment from author about the poem: Inamorata - female lover taper - candle
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Good write SB. Sounds like KP buzzing around and annoying me daily. lol.
Thanks so much Orchi for the read and comment. I'll see if I can find that sorcerer's phone number for you.
Thanks SB. lol. Sorry I've not written much poetry lately, with our ongoing situations here.
You are always missed my friend and I hope that your situation resolves in the best possible way. Have a wonderful day
Thank you SB. It's rather long-term ongoing, for me and close relatives, and there is more than one situation.
Wow this is very clever.It hits home with me because my marriage broke up and my X didn't get along with the boyfriend.A lot to think about in this master work.Certainly well constructed.Great work amigo
Thank you David for your keen review and observations they are deeply appreciated my friend
Your poem posed a notable challenge in its writing style. The themes of jealousy, revenge, and the cyclical nature of love and punishment are thoroughly explored in your work. You illustrate how jealousy can lead to destructive actions, resulting in an endless cycle of vengeance that ultimately harms both parties. On the other hand, the poem functions as a cautionary tale regarding the destructive nature of jealousy and the futility of revenge, emphasizing the emotional turmoil that can stem from betrayal. It prompts readers to contemplate the consequences of their actions and the cyclical nature of love and jealousy.
Thank you friendship for your review and astute observations they are most appreciated
You're very welcome, my friend.
Soren, this is a wickedly clever piece…part dark fairy tale, part revenge myth. The transformation of the lover into the biting fly is such a striking idea, and the image of him rising again from the flames keeps the whole story locked in that endless cycle of consequence. It’s grim, imaginative, and very much your style. Well done, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
Thank you my friend for the read astute eye. Your comments are most valued and your kind words of support are most appreciated.
Most welcome, my friend!
Powerful words.
Thanks Thomas
lol superb my dear sorrenbarret you paint such a wonderful and humorous picture 🌹
Thank you so much Teddy for the read and comment it is as always most appreciated and valued
Like an Hans Christian Anderson story.
Enjoyed.
Thank you Kevin. I appreciate your read and comment maybe all those stories read to me by my mother as a child sunk in.
Clever write soren,
Andy
Thanks Andy I appreciate your feedback
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