Sloth of the present

sorenbarrett

The bone of laziness has grown and even it is arthritic
Exuberance flown, energy turned stone, breath paralytic 
Feet to floor sewn eyelids under weight groan vision granitic
In a bed outgrown all work postpone deaf to any critic

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  • Prachi Dalvi

    Each word weighs so much that u described it in a unique way.Nicely framed and worded!

    • sorenbarrett

      Thank you Prachi for the review and most kind words of support they are most appreciated

    • arqios

      Hope you are doing well. This is so moving and thus arousing concern.🕊️🙏🏻

      • sorenbarrett

        Thank you very much Cryptic not all my poems are about me this was inspired by seen people of today that would rather sit hope than work although I have to admit that I have that nature since childhood to be lazy as well but I fight it and set myself daily goals otherwise I will feel worse tomorrow. Thanks for the concern but here all is normal what ever that is.

        • arqios

          That was the feeling received but just needed to make sure I wasn’t missing anything 🕊️🙏🏻

          • sorenbarrett

            Thanks so much for caring

            • arqios

              Most welcome, dear Soren 🙏🏻🕊️

            • cellinic

              Rather a serious statement, which may be interpreted somehow ambivalently! Best wishes,

              • sorenbarrett

                Ambivalence fits well. thanks so much for the review and comment it is deeply appreciated

              • Tristan Robert Lange

                My friend, this hits with a heavy, dragging weight…like the body itself is resisting motion at every turn. It feels stuck in a way that’s almost physical. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thank you Tristan and so it is and becomes physical

                • Neville


                  There are those who give up far too easily .. and those who by virtue of this or that don't have the choice .. I know what side of the fence I choose to be & although it gets harder, I hope it pays off in the end .. Another good un sir .. Neville

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Neville I thank you for your understanding words of support they are always encouraging

                  • orchidee

                    Good write SB.

                  • Allie561

                    It’s sad to see the new generations without the drive or motivation to work. I feel like I keep seeing AI this AI that, the technology is being abused. I try to not let things just be handed to me. Great poem Soren.

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thank you Allie for your read and understanding comment it is most appreciated

                      • Allie561

                        You’re very welcome Soren

                      • Kevin Hulme

                        I understand all that you are saying here.
                        So many people doing Shopping etc on-line .
                        Not going out.

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thank you Kevin we have gone from physical labor to white colar work to now unemployed gamers I appreciate the review and comment my friend

                        • Goldfinch60

                          Getting older can get this way soren but as i say to people, all is well, I got up this morning.

                          Andy

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thanks so much for the read Andy as long as I\'m on the green side of the grass things are well

                          • ann hegg

                            So amazingly real . A poem where reality meets words

                            • sorenbarrett

                              Thank you for your kindness and supportive remarks they are most appreciated

                              • ann hegg

                                Your welcome

                              • Vipassana

                                great imagery!

                                • sorenbarrett

                                  Thanks so much I deeply appreciate your review



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