When day becomes night
Ask of my day
Did I offer love?
Did I make my work my own?
Did I bear burdens in stride?
Tell me my share is enough
That my work is sufficient
That I cared for another
With your good intentions
Tell me what I have found is contentment
Ask of my day
Ask of my night
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Author:
Katie B. (
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- Comment from author about the poem: May you offer specific feedback of ways I may improve this poem.
- Category: Reflection
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Katie, this carries a quiet honesty that really works…those questions feel real and grounded. I love your use of repetition. Since you asked, if you wanted to refine it...I’d just look at letting your strongest lines breathe a bit more through spacing. Nothing major…just small shaping to let what’s already there land even deeper. Beautifully written, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
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