what actually is

arqios

 

"what actually is"

  

moving through a city route,
noting the way a bus door opens,
the way two strangers negotiate space

 

    at a crossing,
        the way afternoon light
            angles across a shopfront,

 

            all rendered in a single,
    continuous line that feels improvised
but what actually is deliberate.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • sorenbarrett

    This poem speaks to the mind asking what is coincidence and what is planned, what is correlation and what is causation. Introducing man and city creations brings into mind what is real what is not what is man created and what is nature and are we not nature as well and all this just our perspective. Nicely done Cryptic. I think I dove too deep this time

    • arqios

      Not at all dear Soren, very much in that state while observing whilst within one’s skin and milieu 🙏🏻🕊️

      • sorenbarrett

        Whew...

      • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

        a most observant write

      • Tristan Robert Lange

        Wow, arqios…there’s something mesmerizing about the observational stillness in this. The poem moves like a wandering camera lens catching ordinary human motion and quietly transforming it into meaning. The ending reframes the whole thing in such a subtle, satisfying way. Strong work, my friend. A fave for sure. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

        • arqios

          Thanks Tittu🙏🏻🕊️

        • orchidee

          Good write A. I did a rough version called 'Wot is?' or 'Wot is wot?!' (Did I? lol). Well, if Soren made deep comments, there's no knowing what tangent I may go off on, if I do too much 'thinking'. lol.

          • arqios

            And you would be most welcome too, as well🤩🕊️🙏🏻

            • orchidee

              But some say - too much thinking is dangerous, How would I know - I never think too much to find out! heehee.

            • Kevin Hulme

              The Continuation of Time. I feel in this Poem..
              Good Write.

              • arqios

                An excellent descriptive, Kevin! I feel that too. Thanks mate🙏🕊️

              • Goldfinch60

                Well seen things to put on paper Rik.

                Andy

              • Dan Williams

                I try to find something new or interesting at pretty much every stop, details to ward off boredom. Nice work here.

                • arqios

                  Or how much our landmarks change over the years. Nothing stays the same🙏🏻🕊️

                • Neilton

                  The meticulous observation is actually impressive and may I say a romantic view of every day life! Amazing poem

                  • arqios

                    Thanks, Neilson. That made my day🙏🏻🕊️



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