Darkness before dawn

sorenbarrett

A lump in the chest, awoken from sleep devoid of rest, head spinning in the mud
A dullness explains it best, not up to day's test, each thought a sullen thud
There's a darkness at dawn, half awake with a yawn, the fire has gone out
Black thoughts spawn as all hope is gone, I have lost this route

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  • Goldfinch60

    The light will soon be there soren to show you the way.

    Andy

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks so much Gold for the positive energy and kind wishes they are appreciated

    • orchidee

      Good write SB. I too was lost, going down a one-way street. heehee.

      • sorenbarrett

        Thanks so much Orchi it is appreciated

      • Neilton

        This poem conveys a lot of sadness! I hope everything is okay! But as always it is beautifully written

        • sorenbarrett

          Thanks so much for the concern Neilton yes things are fine your read is appreciated

        • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

          good write, enjoyed

        • 2781

          Well I didn't like the sound of that?

          • sorenbarrett

            What darkness before dawn? It is always said that it always gets darkest just before the dawn

          • Paul Bell

            Some days the spark aint sparking and the body feels heavy.
            Hopefully just a blip.

            • sorenbarrett

              Thanks for the kind wish it is appreciated

            • arqios

              Hoping it isn’t about you going through that darkness🙏🏻🕊️

              • sorenbarrett

                No I always get like this while traveling and am traveling all day today. That's the reason for the early post and delayed responses hard to get wifi in airports or even on planes now days. Thanks so much Cryptic

                • arqios

                  Happy travels, friend 🙏🏻🕊️

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thanks mate I'll be getting back home soon

                  • Katie B.

                    Powerful tale of a multitude of struggles and frustration when life is much more challenging than we would choose. Resonates with me and the challenges I face.

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thanks Katie for the read and comment it is most appreciated

                    • Tristan Robert Lange

                      Soren, there’s a bleak clarity to this that hits hard. The lump in the chest, the extinguished fire, the black thoughts spawning at dawn…it all creates the sense of someone trying to move forward while internally stalled out and sinking. And the rhyme and rhythm only deepen that weary spiral. Haunting work, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thanks Tristan a day of travel today and that makes everything disrupted only thirty minutes to respond before wifi is cut off and have to wait until get to the end of the journey tonight to finish the rest

                      • Lorenz

                        From the moon's perspective one can see both dawn and dusk of the earth .

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Very good Lorenz that's why they call it lunacy thanks so much for the read my friend

                        • Friendship

                          Well written, Soren. Your poem "Darkness before dawn" explores feelings of despair, hopelessness, and emotional exhaustion. It captures the internal struggle of waking up to a new day while still feeling trapped in darkness and lethargy. Your poem revolves around the experience of waking up after a restless night, grappling with negative thoughts, and feeling overwhelmed by a lack of energy and motivation. It leaves me sad.

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thank you so much my friend for the read and comment Yes you are right it was intended to carry that emotion. Traveling today and it was the mood of the hour.

                            • Friendship

                              Your Very welcome, my friend. Safe travels.❤️

                              • sorenbarrett

                                Thanks

                              • Teddy.15

                                My, my, the emotion is palpable and so is the magnificent imagery, 🌹

                                • sorenbarrett

                                  Thank you Teddy for the read and comment it is most appreciated my friend

                                • David Wakeling

                                  Oh dear I know the feeling only to well.The storm before the calm.A poem with a strong set of images.I enjoyed reading

                                  • sorenbarrett

                                    Thank you David for the supportive words. I always feel this way just before I travel.

                                  • Kevin Hulme

                                    A good interpretation of a Bad feeling.
                                    All the best.

                                    • sorenbarrett

                                      Thank you Kevin for the read and comment excuse the late response I just noticed it

                                    • NafisaSB

                                      It may have dimmed or is hidden temporarily but will surely be back and the road will be clear to see and follow

                                      • sorenbarrett

                                        Thank you Nafisa for the read and comment yours is a most positive view and most appreciated

                                        • NafisaSB

                                          always welcome - and I humbly thank you for your insightful comments to my works too...God bless you

                                        • Joseph M Marion

                                          Written from the soul very good my friend beautiful. The aches and hardships of life

                                          • sorenbarrett

                                            Thanks so much Joseph for the read and comment it is deeply appreciated



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