Falling down

sorenbarrett

Flat is flat and that is that, one may take a spill on a hill so keep it on the level
Dull is drole so when in a hole don't loose your soul, don't bet with the devil

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  • Neilton

    Such a powerful message here !! We Keep fighting no matter what ,pain and sadness are part of life !! Amazing poem

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks so much Neilton your words mean a lot and are deeply appreciated

    • Goldfinch60

      We must always keep going soren.

      Andy

      • sorenbarrett

        Thanks so much Andy I always appreciate your comments my friend

      • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

        never give up keep plugging away

      • Doggerel Dave

        What is happening to you, Soren?
        So simple and direct...

        • sorenbarrett

          Traveling Dave between air stops not much time to get complicated, just lucky to find wifi and review a few dozen comments. Will be back to normal in a day or two. So nice you noticed my old friend

          • Doggerel Dave

            I seem to remember you were travelling not so long ago, but thought you had reached your destination. Where will you be when this trip is over?

            • sorenbarrett

              I did travel back to Florida and now am going back to Brazil

            • Abdullah123

              The internal rhymes almost made me read it like a rap... which I adore! Wonderfully written and beautiful message a fave

              • sorenbarrett

                Thanks so much Abdullah I deeply appreciate your read and observation of the rhyme. Yes it felt like a rap today

              • Katie B.

                Still sounds forlorn, as did yesterday. Hope all is well.

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thanks so much Katie yes just traveling and is always sad leaving one place known even when going to another known.

                • David Wakeling

                  Betting with the Devil you always loose. Well done

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thanks David for the read and comment yes it seems so my friend he has a lot more experience holds all the cards and the house always wins

                  • Priya Tomar

                    Short poem with a powerful message .
                    Nicely done .

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thanks Priya for the review and understanding words of support it is again most appreciated

                    • arqios

                      No bet's here, thanks 🕊️🙏

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Choice well made. Thanks so much for the read my friend it is as always most appreciated

                        • arqios

                          Most welcome dear friend 🙏🏻🕊️

                        • Friendship

                          Wow, you made me work overtime on this poem. It was short, yet the painting you painted was powerful.
                          Your poem brilliantly illuminates the profound journey of descent and the transformative power of resilience, empowering us to rise above adversity and discover our inner strength in the face of challenge. The vivid imagery of hills and holes spectacularly captures life's unpredictable journey and the vital role of self-reflection in navigating its complexities. Yet at the end, the poet likely aims to impart wisdom, reminding us readers to stay mindful of our choices and the inherent risks in life. You encourage a level-headed approach to navigating challenges, advocating for self-awareness and caution.

                          • sorenbarrett

                            So well stated my friend. Your interpretation captures it all. Thanks so much for the review and comment

                            • Friendship

                              You're very welcome, my friend. I offer apologies for overanalyzing your poem, but your words crafted a distinctive image. As my grandfather, whom I affectionately call Pop pop, would say, I have a tendency to diagnose words much like he diagnoses patients - some individuals possess the insight to perceive patients, while others can decipher a written word, interpreting the thoughts that are put into writing; it seems I've inherited this ability. I don't know if this makes any sense to you.

                            • DLewis88

                              A good mesage. We'll keep going.

                              • sorenbarrett

                                Thanks so much for the read and comment it is appreciated

                              • orchidee

                                Good write SB.

                                • sorenbarrett

                                  Thanks Orchi I appreciate it my friend

                                • Tristan Robert Lange

                                  Soren, this is magnificently minimal and delightfully quirky 🤣 The bouncing rhyme and wordplay keep it light, but there’s still a sly little moral caution sitting underneath the humor. Fun write, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

                                  • sorenbarrett

                                    Thanks Tristan I appreciate the review and kind words of support

                                  • Kevin Hulme

                                    Sounds like good advice. Nice one.

                                    • sorenbarrett

                                      Thank you so much for the read and comment it is most appreciated

                                    • GenXer Sharon 🙏🍀

                                      Short; sweet; and to the point.

                                      • sorenbarrett

                                        Thank you Sharon I appreciate your read and comment.

                                      • Zelda Vanrooyen

                                        Well donee..

                                        • sorenbarrett

                                          Thanks so much for the read and comment it is appreciated



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