Burnt perspectives

sorenbarrett

When a beating becomes a lesson and anger is dressed as criticism
then conversation is served from a delicatessen precooked from egocentrism 
The dough of emotion raises quickly the baker put in too much salt
A tough crust covers it thickly who cooked it said it's not their fault

 

Good conversation cooked too long, there is smoke in the air
The buyer says there is something wrong, in this piece there is a hair
The taste it is bitter, now the buyer has found a fly
Not all things that glitter are gold in a buyer's eye

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  • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

    buyers remorse, good write

  • David Wakeling

    This is a fascinating metaphorical write. On the one hand there is a conflict and on the other there is a bakery.For me the message is clear that you have to be careful when you cook up an argument. An enjoyable read compadre

    • sorenbarrett

      Thank you David I deeply appreciate your read and interpretation that is a good one. Arguments often end up with both buyer and seller loosing no matter where the blame lays.

    • Katie B.

      I read it several times but I'm struggling with it. Operator error. Have trouble understanding the underlying meaning.

      • sorenbarrett

        Thanks so much for the attempt Katie in fact it is about just that communication. Appreciate your read Katie

      • orchidee

        A fine write SB.

        • sorenbarrett

          Thanks so much Orchi it is appreciated

        • Tristan Robert Lange

          Soren, I love this metaphor. Turning a difficult conversation into something baked, served, and ultimately rejected is both clever and painfully relatable. The imagery makes the emotional dynamic immediately accessible. Wonderful work, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

          • sorenbarrett

            Tristan I can always rely on you to cut to the core of the issue or poem. I deeply appreciate your interpretation and read

          • Syd

            Hi Sorenbarret, this is a very clever well written poem.

            - Syd

            • sorenbarrett

              Thanks so much for the review Syd I appreciate your visit and read as well as comment

            • hzugman

              Nicely done, SB

            • Kevin Hulme

              Two sides to an Argument. Who's Right? and Who's Wrong?
              What tastes like Sugar to One is Salt to the Other. Nice one.

              • sorenbarrett

                Nicely said Kevin. Thank you so much for the read and comment my friend it is most appreciated.

              • rhmn_7

                You have nailed it with the last verse, great ending Soren!

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thanks so much for your read and most kind comment it is deeply appreciated

                • arqios

                  Been on the brunt end of this in the past quarter century of online poetry. But in the end the burnt end would be to those who are unkind and abuse the powers that be at their disposal to curse rather then, bless however sheep's clothing their dressed-up critique is. A true Fave 🕊️🙏

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thanks so much my friend for the read and comment my friend. Yes that is the sad truth of it

                    • arqios

                      Most welcome Soren 🕊️🙏

                    • Goldfinch60

                      True words soren.

                      Andy

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thank you so much Andy for your read and comment to this piece it is as always most appreciated

                      • GenXer Sharon 🙏🍀

                        A most powerful write delivered with important lessons.

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thanks so much Sharon I value your comment my friend

                        • Donteatmecows

                          I enjoyed it! the baking analogy was good and i relate with the buyer it has an ick-factor when u find hair in something...it disgusted me out!

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thanks so much for the read and comment it means a lot.



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