Archetype of man

sorenbarrett

An eye of lust another of envy overlook an elevated chin of pride. 
Below a flaming heart of wrath and two grasping fists of greed
as well as a gut of gluttony held back by corpulent sloth
Convinced of his magnificence this bloated wonder gloats

 

His feet resting on a stolen stool of nature he claims as his own
Chewed gum he gives to children as a magnanimous gesture

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  • orchidee

    Good write SB.

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks so much Orchi for the read and comment I do appreciate it my friend

    • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

      I know a few like that, good write

    • cellinic

      Rather a deep and multifaceted write

      • sorenbarrett

        Thank you so much for the read Cellinic it is most appreciated

      • David Wakeling

        Wow that is certainly one of the archetypes.Probably not his finest hour but accurate.An interesting read.Well done

        • sorenbarrett

          Thanks so much David for the review and comment it is appreciated and most valued

        • arqios

          Reminiscent of the 7 deadly sins, ironically seen as the hero by many and magnified in a mirror reflection by self. Something like that. 🕊️🙏

          • sorenbarrett

            Well said my friend and right on. Why would we identify seven deadly sins if they were not part of us? They seems to lay in our DNA. Thanks so much for the read and comment it is as always most appreciated.

            • arqios

              Most welcome dear friend 🙏🕊️

            • Paul Bell

              Coming to a town near you, a man of the people, or at least that's what it says on the can.
              Would you buy a used car off this guy, service record included.
              The world it seems is lead by these people, and they don't seem to die out either.

              • sorenbarrett

                Thanks Paul I appreciate the read and comment yes I would have to agree maybe it is because there is a disproportionate amount of them in the population to elect.

              • antra.coree

                Outstanding

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thank you Antra for your read and kind word of comment it is deeply appreciated

                • Katie B.

                  Well crafted and thought provoking.

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thanks so much Katie for you kind support it just seems that human beings have these elements in their DNA. Not to say that there are not kind and generous people out there but the majority are lacking

                  • Tristan Robert Lange

                    Soren, it was the stolen stool of nature that really caught me. Such a brilliant image. The figure isn't even standing on their own achievement...they've appropriated what was already there and claimed ownership over it. That lands with real force. Wonderful write, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thanks so much my good friend for noticing that I wondered if anyone would follow that lead. Yes indeed we tend to take credit for what is not ours be it nature or anything else. Your words are deeply gratifying and appreciated

                    • orchidee

                      Oh dear! I can't think very cryptically at present - when did I ever?! lol. But some personal matter requiring my thoughts just now.
                      Though I don't use 'copy and paste' for my often 'good write' / 'fine write' comment.

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Orchi you always make my day somehow either by your writes, hymns or comments you are a joy.

                        • orchidee

                          Thank you SB, though I only write a standard short reply, quite a lot of the time. 🙂

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Perfectly fine just knowing you care enough to read it is sufficient

                            • orchidee

                              Thank you SB.

                            • Kevin Hulme

                              Had an Image of Jabba the Hut.
                              Can't argue with your Sentiments.
                              A good one.

                              • sorenbarrett

                                Thank you Kevin for your read and remark it is deeply appreciated

                              • Friendship

                                Well said; your poem revolves around the seven deadly sins, personified in a character bloated with pride and entitlement. The imagery evokes a sense of grotesque excess, contrasting the character's self-perception with his morally repugnant actions.

                                • sorenbarrett

                                  Thank you my friend for the read and understanding comment it is most appreciated

                                • Goldfinch60

                                  So many out there like this soren. Fine words.

                                  Andy

                                  • sorenbarrett

                                    Thanks for the read and comment my friend

                                  • Zelda Vanrooyen

                                    Wowww the words and the message it conveys..well written

                                    • sorenbarrett

                                      Thank you Zelda for the review and comment it is most appreciated and valued

                                    • Samprikta Paul

                                      This is so well written that I felt disgusted by the idea of men, whereas the word 'lust' made me uncomfortable.

                                      • sorenbarrett

                                        Thanks so much Samprikta for your review and comment. Men a generic term for both sexes where lust applies to desire for all objects not just sexual. Sorry it made you uncomfortable but I guess a deadly sin would. Your words are most appreciated.



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