My poems are old fashioned they said, you write for the dead
Now days poetic rhyme has become a crime, they say by your heart be led
Needn't spell, a story to tell, just vomit on the page
Thoughts in tennis shoes carry daily news, sex, joy or rage
Contestants in a race no need for meter to keep pace, just let it run
Neologisms you create giving spelling no weight and meaning there is none
Poems now short stories carry no poetic glories, blobs of ink on a page
Just words droppings of birds, poetry newspaper on the bottom of their cage
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a great analysis and a fav
Thanks so much for the review my friend your support is most valued
most welcome
Oh I agree here. So often I have seen the non-words "wap" or "wassup". It strikes me as an excuse for not being able to write coherently.You certainly feel passionately about the issue.And rightly so.A great poem. Here here
Thanks for the support David I have nothing against well thought out neologisms the bard himself made up many that have come into common usage, nothing against free verse I use it from time to time and it has its place, nothing against jargon to cast a mood in a poem, I have used it too. In order for an artist to artfully violate rules they must first be a master of the rules. Ask other artists like Picasso, Van Gogh. I don't claim to be a master so I try not to violate the rules too often.
So sad, that current state of affairs 😢🕊️🙏🏻
Thanks my friend for the support and understanding your read and comment are most appreciated
I suppose every generation formulates their own poetry.
Rap comes to mind as one of them.
Though when I have to google some poems to get the phrase right, I might think to myself, theres another poem around the corner I can read.
Thank you Paul for your read and comment. Yes indeed the older I get the more I see that age often breeds rigidity and intolerance.
A few people on this site still have something to say that doesn't rely on the contrived creativity of an intelligent artefact !
A fence keeps the chickens in offence keeps them out. Intelligent I wouldn't know about since it takes one to know one. Thanks for the read Lorenz Disclaimer: the views expressed in this poem do not necessarily reflect those of the author any similarity between characters in this poem and real life are merely coincidental.
Soren, this gave me a good chuckle, my friend. 😄 As soon as I saw the title, I checked to make sure my poem wiped itself! 🤣 Then I realized it was a senryu. 😅 There is a wonderfully curmudgeonly energy here...part lament, part satire, and part defense of the craft you grew up loving. Well done. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
Thanks so much my friend you took it right, it is a mix of all those things indeed. Your remarks are always most anticipated
Hi sorenbarrett, this poem made me smile
Thank you Mirela I am glad that it made you smile. Yes it was partly tongue in cheek part serious and I deeply appreciate your read and comment.
welcome sorenbarrett
I think I'll just throw some comments against the wall and see what sticks. Maybe, those "word droppings" if arranged properly, or if they contained some sort of meaning, perhaps then the author could do the work and present them as readable. (i.e. "Portrait' by E .E. Cummings or "Libations" by Amanda Gorman). Are writers (poets) not responsible for their art? Perhaps , they should paint "by numbers" before they besiege us with their attempted "Mons Lisa". - Phil A.
Thanks so much for not only the read but comment. Yes I thought that this may stir a nest of bees or maybe even wasps. I certainly do not consider myself a poetry expert or anything close to it but I have been told by several other writers that rhyme is out of style and too constraining. I write in free verse from time to time as my last poem was. The real issue is not style or type of poetry but rather competency in expressing what is inside. Some writings are hardly legible with not only misspellings (I misspell from time to time) but incomplete words, grammar that can not be understood, and no emotion. Breaking the rules is fine if one knows them and if it is for a purpose but to ignore them for no purpose I do not call a poem. Forgive the rant just a personal thing I guess.
Amen
Must admit I've never been into the 'Beat Poets'.
Read 'On the Road' a few years back , Couldn't see what the fuss was about.
Thanks so much Kevin for your review and comment I deeply appreciate it.
A serious and sincere, reverberating statement. My fave, my friend
I thank you sincerely for your read and comment it is most appreciated
Very true but all types of poetry can be wonderful.
Andy
Thanks so much Andy I agree poetry is like music all genres can be wonderful but that does not mean that all songs are well written or well performed and some I may not like.
Agree wholeheartedly with the topic presented so well in verse 🤗
Thank you for your most kind support and reading of this piece it is most appreciated
Ah c'mon...
Some like rhymes and some like stories
None diminish poet's glory
Write it down...spit it out
It's all about the author..no?
Shall we take a vote?
Thanks so much for the review and words of comment your words are valued
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