Isis

sorenbarrett

The moon with soft tidal hands pulls a watery blanket over sleeping shores
An undulating navy satin bedcover sports a lunar sent ribbon silver sequins by the scores
Soft maternal breezes hum a tropical lullaby to sleeping sands on beaches
A warm nights breast gives rest as a dreaming mind expands out of reaches
Oh jewel bedazzled sky where wishes are made on shooting stars
Let romance fill the night and in naked light love of Venus seduces hate of Mars

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  • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

    much enjoyed

  • soheil khodaparasti

    A blend of mythology into a meditation on imagination and love. I like the personification of the moon in the first line: “The moon with soft tidal hands pulls a watery blanket over sleeping shores”.

    • sorenbarrett

      Thank you my friend for your review and most kind words of encouragement they are most important to me

      • soheil khodaparasti

        You are welcome.

      • arqios

        The interaction between Mars and Venus is very interesting 🕊️🙏🏻

        • sorenbarrett

          Thank you so much Cryptic with the intermediary of Isis the moon the interaction becomes cosmic. I appreciate the read my friend.

          • arqios

            Most definitely so! 🙏🏻🕊️

          • Lorenz

            Sea of tranquillity so sweet symphony ...

            • sorenbarrett

              Thank you Lorenz for the review and yes you have hit upon a linkage there.

            • Soman Ragavan

              It has been said that a man cannot enter a river twice : by the second time, it is not the same man and it is not the same river... This ties back to the ideas in the poem : when you look again, the vision will never be quite the same again...

              • sorenbarrett

                Thank you so much Soman for the read and comment they are most appreciated

              • orchidee

                Good write SB.

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thanks so much my friend for the support and read it is most appreciated

                • Tristan Robert Lange

                  Soren, what I enjoyed most here is the way the natural world becomes almost mythic. The moon, the sea, the breeze, the stars, Venus, and Mars all play their part in a nocturnal symphony of romance and possibility. The imagery is rich without feeling overworked, and the closing contrast between love and conflict provides a fitting culmination. Beautifully crafted, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thanks my friend for the most kind review of this piece. You again have seen its essence. Your words are deeply appreciated

                  • Kevin Hulme

                    'Dreaming mind expands out of reach'. So true.
                    Isn't Mars the God of War? So Hopefully Venus will sort him out. I liked this. A good Write.

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thanks so much for the read and comment yes Mars is the god of war and indeed as such a perfect object to be seduced by the goddess of love

                    • Goldfinch60

                      May that romance fill the skies forever soren.

                      Andy

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thank you Andy for the read and comment it is appreciated and so may it be.

                      • RSM0812

                        Your poem is universally read and written. Enjoyed a lot. Emotioned universe how you cry tears of power.

                      • RSM0812

                        Your poem is universally read and written. Enjoyed a lot. Emotioned universe how you cry tears of power.

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thank you RSM for your read and comment it is deeply appreciated

                        • Syd

                          Beautiful poetry that Sorenbarret 👏👏

                          - Syd

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thank you so much for the read and comment Syd

                          • Joseph M Marion

                            Very well written I love this it draws a picture of my mind of how love triumphs and how nature can win and how we can look at things God bless you

                            • sorenbarrett

                              You are very kind and I appreciate your read and comment my friend



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