I sit listening for sounds around me

sorenbarrett

I sit listening for sounds around me, the hum of a motor, the chirp of a bird.

A breeze blows rustling leaves.

In the back room the drip of a faucet is a metronome in two four time.

A distant bark of a dog answered by another.

The sound of an ax splitting wood.

A rattling lid on a boiling pan.

The sizzle of a drop on a hot stove top.

A fly drones then bangs against the window pane banging in a frantic rhythm.

Dust falling like snowflakes muffled.

Somewhere a radio plays.

There are voices too, thoughts converted into words.

Words spin and twist growing louder weaving a fabric.

I hear the crackling of flames.

Poems burn in my mind.

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  • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

    Much enjoyed write, I sat listening with you

  • arqios

    Great to witness the birthing of a poem. Birthing is not always the most accurate word 🙏🕊️

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks so much Cryptic I appreciate your reviewing this piece and your comment my fiend.

      • arqios

        Most welcome my friend🙏🕊️

      • Friendship

        Nicely written. Your poem emphasizes the importance of being attuned to one's environment, suggesting that inspiration can be found in the mundane aspects of life. It reflects a broader theme of mindfulness and the transformative power of observation in the creative process.

        • sorenbarrett

          Thank you Friendship you have put it well and it is appreciated

          • Friendship

            You're so welcome, my friend

          • orchidee

            Yes, sounds like some mindfulness there. That can be useful, though some of it has eccentric elements in it, I think.

            • sorenbarrett

              Thank you Orchi you are right I am eccentric.

              • orchidee

                lol.

              • Kevin Hulme

                When ever I hear the Sounds out of my Window, It reminds me of 'Rear Window' and Jimmy Stewart watching the Neighbours. The day in motion.
                A fave right here .

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thank you Kevin for the read and comment it is always most appreciated

                • cellinic

                  I'd rather agree with arqios that what's essentially meant is the birth of a poem. Nicely done.

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thank you so much for the read and comment it is a very nice interpretation

                  • Shahrukh

                    Reading this feels like i was with you when you were writing it. Loved it soren

                    • sorenbarrett

                      You are very kind and I thank you for your read and comment

                    • Goldfinch60

                      Wonderful words soren, poems can come from many places.

                      Andy

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thank you Andy for your review. Yes they can and do, sometimes out of the least expected.

                      • Teddy.15

                        Oh yes what a beautiful poem and I was drawn right into the sound and last lines 🌹

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thank you Teddy for the read and comment it is deeply appreciated my friend

                        • Tristan Robert Lange

                          Soren, what struck me most is how attentively this listens. Every sound feels like part of the same unfolding composition, from the smallest movement to the largest. By the end, the outside world and the inner world seem to meet in the flames. Powerful poem, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thanks so much my friend your review as attentive as the poem and very deeply appreciated

                          • Divya Dansena

                            You just heard nicely, the things , which just passes by our ears . What we see is the thing that you just sense by your whole body . You’r a great observer and a poet .

                            • sorenbarrett

                              You are most Kind Divya and your words are cherished. I appreciate your read and comment



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