What is a friend

sorenbarrett

As a young fool going to school I brought a magnifying glass
I told a friend, light I could bend, showing him at recess from class
Paper for the capper, I laid in the dry grass of an open field
Through the glass a dot of sun did pass, soon heat it did yield

 

Before long, a whisp of smoke grew strong, then a flame did erupt
I was filled with dread as fire quickly spread, it was all so abrupt
Fire the cry, we ran my friend and I, but soon we were caught
Firetrucks arrived, a lie we contrived the accusation we both fought

 

Emotionally shaken, to the principal taken, thought we would dance
I had a thought, the glass I brought put down the back of my pants
The principal did say that someone must pay for this heinous wrong
Seeing the paddle, my friend would not tattle, both our tongues held strong

 

Noticing what I'd done, my friend was the one to confess
Knowing that glass would cut my ass, he alone guilt did profess

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Comments9

  • soheil khodaparasti

    Well crafted and emotionally engaging. A narrative poem with a beginning, rising action, climax, and resolution, structured in four quatrains representing the introduction, conflict, crisis, and resolution, and exploring the themes of childhood innocence, fear, friendship, and moral courage.

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks so much Soheil for that wonderful and most analytic review it is deeply appreciated and valued my friend

      • soheil khodaparasti

        You are welcome. It was a pleasure to read your poem and thank you for sharing it.

      • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

        Much enjoyed read my friend

      • arqios

        Now there's a friend. Unsung heroes that need to be given airtime. 🕊️🙏

        • sorenbarrett

          Thank you my friend for the review and comment it is deeply appreciated as always

          • arqios

            Most welcome friend 🕊️🙏

          • Friendship

            Nicely written story. Your story narrates a childhood incident involving two friends who accidentally start a fire while experimenting with a magnifying glass. The aftermath reveals their friendship's strength and the moral dilemmas they face when confronted with potential punishment

            • sorenbarrett

              Thank you Friendship for your read and synopsis of this poem it is most valued my friend

              • Friendship

                You're very welcome, my friend

              • ms.divine

                Great read 🫂🫶🏿

              • Tristan Robert Lange

                Soren, this is a wonderful blend of humor, suspense, and childhood mischief. It feels like one of those stories everyone has tucked away somewhere, and that ending brought it home perfectly. Really enjoyed this one, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thanks so much Tristan a true story it is every detail from childhood. Appreciate the read and comment my friend

                • orchidee

                  A fine write SB. Yes, I remember that at school.

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thanks Orchi for the read and comment were you there to?

                    • orchidee

                      Yessssss lol.

                    • Kevin Hulme

                      Yes a Real Friend. A good Write.

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thank you Kevin for the read and comment it is deeply appreciated

                      • Goldfinch60

                        Very emotive write soren and shows a true friend.

                        Andy

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thanks so much Andy your read and comment mean a good deal and are most appreciated



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