Be willing to give what you ask

sorenbarrett

You ask me to wear wings of an angel, if I asked would you wear devils horns
You want me to surrender my pleasures, do you wear a crown of thorns
Your words in stone written, your tongue the finger of God, with it orders spell
You asked me to follow you to heaven would you follow me to hell

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  • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

    good write, it only asks equality

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks Norman for the review and that is exactly the point my friend. I appreciate your read and comment

      • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

        always most welcome

      • Doggerel Dave

        Come on Soren, please explain - I don't follow your argument.

        Enjoy the poetic flow however...

        • sorenbarrett

          Thanks so much Dave this one came from two things. One the rigid idea of love where people say I love you so much that I would follow you anywhere. But would they? and the second idea that we are arrogant enough to say that we know what is good and what is evil or bad. There may well be a higher order value system for say nature itself and we should not presume that ours is superior. I so appreciate your read and questioning comment my friend

          • Doggerel Dave

            Thanks for that, Soren. If not clear then ask - should lead to more creative conversations than one line affirmations accompanied with a heart.
            ! find value in your response "There may well be a higher order value system for say nature itself and we should not presume that ours is superior". Wouldn't have obtained that if acceptance and a four word response was the order of the day .

            • sorenbarrett

              I thank you my friend for asking and welcome your responses, they are highly valued

            • arqios

              A most moving and persuasive write Soren🙏🕊️

              • sorenbarrett

                Thank you Cryptic for the read and comment of understanding it is as always appreciated my friend.

                • arqios

                  Most welcome dear friend🕊️🙏

                • Tristan Robert Lange

                  Soren, this really grabbed me. The whole poem builds toward that final question, and it lands with real weight. There's an honesty here that challenges easy assumptions and invites genuine self-examination. Powerful write, my friend. A fave for sure.🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thank you my friend for the read and support so many time we ask people to do something assuming it easy when it is not. So would they do something as difficult for us?

                  • orchidee

                    Good write SB.

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thank you Orchi I appreciate your continued support my friend

                    • soheil khodaparasti

                      Great job. Your poem questions the legitimacy of moral demands by using religious imagery and by confronting the peaker with an unspecified authority figure.

                      What fascinated me most was your poem’s emotional progression. By moving from accusation to challenge, it broadens the conflict beyond personal resentment and transforms it into a universal exploration of sacrifice, authority, and mutual devotion.

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thank you Soheil for the read and comment. Your conceptualization of the write is most appreciated and valued

                        • soheil khodaparasti

                          You are most welcome. Wishing you continued inspiration and many more beautiful writes.

                        • peto

                          I'm not getting involved with the intellectual conversation
                          But I am faving this
                          Excellent

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thank you very much for the review and fave it is appreciated

                          • peto

                            I'm not getting involved with the intellectual conversation
                            But I am faving this
                            Excellent

                          • Paul Bell

                            I will follow you to the end of the earth, but only because I know the earth is round.
                            Once upon a time when I thought you could fall over the edge of earth, I might have lied a little bit.
                            Man is a superior being, that's why we kill each other.

                            • sorenbarrett

                              Thank you Paul you got the idea. Your read and comment are very much appreciated.

                            • Goldfinch60

                              Very emotive words soren showing both sides of the coin of life.

                              Andy

                              • sorenbarrett

                                Thank you so much Andy your words are most appreciated

                              • DLewis88

                                It's well written. You did a amazing job.

                                • sorenbarrett

                                  Thank you so much for the read and comment it is most appreciated

                                  • DLewis88

                                    You're welcome

                                  • Donteatmecows

                                    hell yeah! this is a bangar! 🙂 it appears to me to be someone pointing out hypocrisy...just my inital thought yet of course not the author's meaning

                                    • sorenbarrett

                                      Thanks so much for your read and interpretation they are appreciated and you might well say that it addresses one form of hypocrisy



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