Whisps of love

sorenbarrett

Through a paper straw he drank his smoke, like a thirsty man water
Burnt, a life's harvest dispersed in air, a love fading the more he sought her 
More parched with each exhausted puff, each gulp sucks him dry
A burning desert his scorched thoughts, no oasis his wet eye

 

How do you call back smoke once exhaled
or vapors of time from a relationship failed
A burnt out cigarette butt you throw away
but its dead smell with you will stay night and day

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Comments7

  • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

    great write and a fav.

  • Teddy.15

    Loves lingering taste 🌹

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks so much Teddy for the read and comment of understanding. It is deeply appreciated my friend

    • orchidee

      Good write SB.

      • sorenbarrett

        Thank you Orchi for your read of this piece it is most appreciated my friend

      • Paul Bell

        Never try and rekindle a failed relationship.
        Men for some reason are more guilty than this than women.
        Smoke your cigarette, and who knows, when the smoke clears, a new woman might be waiting.

        • sorenbarrett

          Thank you for the read my friend and the understanding it is most appreciated

        • Tristan Robert Lange

          Soren, what a poignant piece. I love how the image of smoke evolves into a meditation on time, memory, and relationships. By the end, the discarded cigarette may be gone, but its lingering scent becomes the perfect metaphor for the traces some experiences leave behind. Beautifully done, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

          • sorenbarrett

            Thank you my friend for your read and continued support and encouragement through your kind and understanding comments

          • Kevin Hulme

            When Love lands with a Thundering Splash:
            Those Ripples keep moving when the Passion is Past.
            Enjoyed this.

            • sorenbarrett

              Than you Kevin for the read and encouraging comment it is as always appreciated

              • Kevin Hulme

                My Pleasure.

              • Goldfinch60

                Good write soren, i used to smoke but gave up 16th October 1982, not that I am counting of course. LOL

                Andy

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thank you Andy I appreciate your read and comment my friend that has been quite some time ago.



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