Values

sorenbarrett

A rock tablet called a table bears a warning label written as an ancient fable
Etched on stone by a finger of bone a manufactures instructions on what we are able 
Time has worn it away a polished side marble top on display, past scratches considered a fable 

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  • Teddy.15

    Ive visited the Genovese caves in Levanzo sicily and your poem brought back many memories 🌹

    • sorenbarrett

      Thank you Teddy for the read and kind support you offer

    • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

      another fine write my friend much enjoyed

    • arqios

      Fables, myths and legends all seem to be a product of hindsight🕊️🙏🏻

      • sorenbarrett

        Heroes turn legend and then myth finally religion. Are our values not formed on such. Thanks so much Cryptic for the read and comment it is most appreciated

        • arqios

          Most welcome Soren 🙏🏻🕊️

        • Lorenz

          Rock-carved writing that carries within it the frozen memory of a few ancient fables...

          • sorenbarrett

            So is the myth of Moses and the ten famous commandments. Too bad the original got broken, I wonder if anyone has found any of those pieces. Thanks for the read my friend

            • Lorenz

              It is true that the old testament is a compilation of ancient Sumerian legends .

              • sorenbarrett

                And a few others borrowed and stolen from other cultures along the way

              • soheil khodaparasti

                Your use of the word “tablet” layers multiple meanings into a single image, suggesting that every era has its own tablet carrying instructions.

                Similarly, “a finger of bone” suggests a mortal hand. Though the author is long dead, the message survives, as if time itself were the true author of the warning. It also implies that mortal beings can create messages that outlast their makers.

                These subtleties are truly impressive.

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thank you so much Soheil your insights are always deeply appreciated. Yes indeed Moses is long dead and those tablets have outlasted him.

                  • soheil khodaparasti

                    Thank you for your kind words. Something profound and noteworthy is that the tablets have outlasted the people who carved them, yet the tablets still embody the context that gave them meaning.

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Indeed

                    • Tristan Robert Lange

                      Soren, I love the way you compress big ideas into such economical language. The metaphor of commandments becoming a polished tabletop says so much without ever needing to explain itself...what once instructed now risks becoming little more than furniture. That's the image I'll be carrying away from this one. Strong work, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thanks so much Tristan I do appreciate your reads and comments my friend

                      • orchidee

                        Good write SB.

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thanks so much Orchi you are appreciated

                          • orchidee

                            I will post a poem some day again - dried up just now. Gone a bit mouldy with my only 'Good/fine write' comments mainly.

                          • Allie561

                            This poem has a mysterious feel to it, I loved it!

                            • sorenbarrett

                              Thank you Allie for the review and comment yes values are mysterious indeed

                            • mylastwrites

                              Another very enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing.

                              • sorenbarrett

                                Thanks so much my friend for the read and comment it is deeply appreciated

                              • Kevin Hulme

                                Apparently there are new discoveries all the time about our Ancient Ancestors.
                                Interesting stuff.

                                • sorenbarrett

                                  Thank you so much Kevin for your review and comment it is most appreciated

                                • cully45

                                  Brilliant piece. Nice work. Regards Owen

                                  • sorenbarrett

                                    Thank you Owen for the read and comment it is deeply appreciated

                                  • Butter

                                    I’m illiterate but it sounded nice coming out form my face hole :3!

                                    • sorenbarrett

                                      The illiteracy I doubt but thank you for the read and comment my friend

                                    • JBentley

                                      Basic truth!

                                      • sorenbarrett

                                        Thank you J for the read and comment it is most appreciated

                                      • rrodriguez

                                        Soren, this sounds like the Ten Commandments being reduced to a fable. What you have written carries the message of a society that has lowered God’s commands to a lesser level—something once sacred and authoritative now treated as an ancient story or artifact. I find the imagery powerful and thought-provoking. Thank you for sharing. Be blessed!

                                        • sorenbarrett

                                          Thank you very much Rodriguez for the read and interpretation it is most valued my friend

                                        • Rhan Sterling Henry

                                          Isn't poetic license great? Nice word play.

                                          • sorenbarrett

                                            Thanks so much for the read and comment my friend yes such license some would like to revoke and fine.

                                            • Rhan Sterling Henry

                                              Savonarola 1497



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