Precarious

sorenbarrett

Looking down
Teetering 
A pause
Tottering
The crest before the trough
That point between 
Before the balance of the pendulum turns over
A silent moment in the eye of a hurricane. 

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  • Teddy.15

    You just described every politician of our times 🤣 sorrenbarret your emotional poetry leaves me on the edge for sure. Kudos 🌹

    • sorenbarrett

      Thank you Teddy for the read and comment it is always most appreciated

    • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

      I echo Teddys comments

    • arqios

      A dizzying ride for all in our global bedroom community 🙏🏻🕊️

      • sorenbarrett

        Thank you Cryptic yes as a child I loved such rides for the thrills but now with fragile bones I prefer to keep my feet on the ground. I appreciate your review my friend and your support.

      • Lorenz

        My damn autistic perspective is more inspired by the menacing tornado about to strike than the deep metaphor ...Really sorry !

        • sorenbarrett

          Thanks Lorenz that is the point indeed In the center of it all there is peace. Trouble is that half has already passed over and half is still to come and when it does that wind changes directions.

          • Lorenz

            Actually that required a lot of metaphorical thinking.

            • sorenbarrett

              Thanks my friend but time for reflection is before or after the storm the rest is hot air.

            • Paul Bell

              The eye, the only part of the hurricane that's calm.
              Seems sort of strange with such a destructive force.
              A bit like Trump when he's sleeping.

              • sorenbarrett

                Thanks Paul I do appreciate the support and read. You mean permanently sleeping?

              • orchidee

                Good write SB.

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thanks my friend I appreciate it

                • 8Blackwidow8

                  (Before the balance of the pendulum turns over
                  A silent moment in the eye of a hurricane)

                  Well put here. I'm such a fan already.

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thank you so much you are most kind and your words are most appreciated

                  • Kevin Hulme

                    This could Sum-Up so many things, not just one. Apply it to whatever you think fit.
                    Good Write.

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thanks Kevin you are so right it could. I appreciate your read and comment my friend

                    • Tristan Robert Lange

                      Soren, this is one heck of a poem. The tension builds quietly and leaves me holding my breath...waiting for the inevitable shift. Brilliantly done, my friend! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

                      • sorenbarrett

                        I thank you my friend for the read and most kind and generous words they are appreciated

                      • soheil khodaparasti

                        A powerful image of suspended tension.

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thank you so much my friend for the read and understanding of this piece. It is most appreciated

                          • soheil khodaparasti

                            You are welcome.

                          • NafisaSB

                            That’s the trickiest part and the most challenging. Well represented 👌

                            • sorenbarrett

                              Thanks for the read Nafisa your words are most appreciated

                            • Rhan Sterling Henry

                              Relational open verse, done the right way. Too many toss a word salad onto the page. It must be evocative. Joseph Conrad once said "Art carries its justification in every line."

                              • sorenbarrett

                                Thank you Rhan for the review and kind words of support they are most appreciated and valued

                              • Megan Blaney

                                Wonderfully simple, yet profound.

                                • sorenbarrett

                                  Thank you Megan for the read and comment it means a lot

                                • boot

                                  Cool...I'm an old fisherman and take it literally

                                  • sorenbarrett

                                    Thanks so much for the read and comment do not loose your footing on the edge of the boat or while standing in a rushing stream.



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