Freedom

sorenbarrett

We try to seize freedom like we reach for the sky
It washes over us like a storm but leaves us dry
Illusive as a fish in a clear stream
Reaching for it one only grabs a dream

 

Love is made of a bar of gold
You may only hold it if a child or old
Others try to buy or sell it I'm told
But its sister Passion is the one that can be sold

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  • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

    Most things have a price my friend

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks so much for the read and comment it is deeply appreciated. Unfortunately it seems that the price now days is not one of purchase but only a lease.

      • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

        so true , always welcome

      • Syd

        Hi Sorenbarret, yes I agree with this clever write. Passion can indeed be sold but love cannot.

        - Syd 🍄

        • sorenbarrett

          Thank you so much Syd for your read and comment it means a great deal to me and is most valued.

        • Doggerel Dave

          I'll vote for freedom anytime, Soren; but as you say...

          On love? No comment.

          • sorenbarrett

            Thanks my old friend for the read and comment. Yes indeed we all have different points of view and I believe they are all right in the eyes of the holder. Your words are valued and visit most appreciated Dave

          • Demar Desu

            Loving the rhyme scheme Soren

            • sorenbarrett

              Thanks so much Demar your read is most appreciated Demar

            • arqios

              Some things we strive and gravitate towards but cannot own, ultimately tendered by the currency of passion. And that seems what we daily trade in 🙏🕊️

              • sorenbarrett

                Thanks so much Cryptic for your review and comment it is most appreciated my friend

              • orchidee

                Good write SB.

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thank you Orchi for the read and comment it is always most appreciated

                • Carlos Alberto BUSTILLOS

                  Often, we mistake desire for love, though there are as many kinds of love as there are boundless hearts.
                  A thought-provoking poem, especially in an age where everything is monetized and bartered...

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thank you Carlos so much for the read and comment it is most appreciated my friend

                  • Paul Bell

                    What price is passion if love ebbs away.
                    What price is freedom if you open your mouth to loud.
                    What you think you have, in reality you don't.

                    • sorenbarrett

                      A comment as poetic as any poem. Thanks so much for the read and support my friend

                    • peto

                      Always enjoy reading from your pen soren
                      "But it's sister passion " is a stunning line

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thank you Peto for your read and encouragement it means a lot

                      • Kevin Hulme

                        Fine Poem on Freedom and Love.
                        Last Stanza reminds me of that great Cole Porter Song: 'Love for Sale'. The Manhattan Transfer did a fine Rendition. A fave.

                        • sorenbarrett

                          Thank you so much Kevin for your review and most kind words they are appreciated

                        • Tristan Robert Lange

                          Soren, this really made me stop and think…I like how you contrast freedom and love with the ways people try to possess them. There’s a quiet philosophical thread running through both stanzas that lingers after the read. Beautiful work, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

                          • sorenbarrett

                            Thank you so much Tristan for the read and comment it is deeply appreciated

                          • soheil khodaparasti

                            A reflective and philosophical poem.

                            • sorenbarrett

                              Thank you Soheil for the read and comment it is most appreciated

                              • soheil khodaparasti

                                You are welcome.

                              • Donteatmecows

                                lovely! 🙂

                                • sorenbarrett

                                  Thank you my friend for the word of encouragement. It is appreciated



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