Time

sorenbarrett

A second cut in two on a knife edge
Betwixt space connecting two heart beats
In the middle of a flashing thought
A wound in time splayed open for naught
Hard is the hammer that split it wide
Cold is the blade that looked inside

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  • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

    I can feel the cold steel

  • Lorenz

    a rather surgical view of time ...

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks Lorenz dissecting it results in finding it an empty balloon that stretches when inflated and shrinks with trauma.

    • arqios

      An instant fave my friend. 🙏🏻🕊️

      • sorenbarrett

        You are very kind my friend and your words are most appreciated

      • orchidee

        Good write SB. You spent that extra second we had one year? We must take care not to spend it all at once. lol.

        • sorenbarrett

          Thanks Orchi that is why it is split into pieces

        • soheil khodaparasti

          Really beautiful. I can trace a Dickinson-like conceit: something invisible and intangible—in this case, a moment in time—is imagined as a physical thing that can be cut, split, wounded, and examined.

          • sorenbarrett

            Thanks so much Soheil for the read and interpretation of this piece it is as always most appreciated my friend.

            • soheil khodaparasti

              My pleasure. I am always happy to read your work and spend time with the thoughts and images within it.

            • Goldfinch60

              Fine words soren showing the sorrow in the world.

              Andy

              • sorenbarrett

                Thank you Andy your words mean a lot to me.

              • Kevin Hulme

                Strange thing Time. Can't feel or see it. Except in Old Photographs of yourself, and you can see it's Handy work done.
                Good Write.

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thank you Kevin for your review. Yes we have a hard time believing in things we can't sense with a few exceptions God, time and air.

                  • Kevin Hulme

                    A lot of truth in your Comment. 👍

                  • Tristan Robert Lange

                    Soren, this really grabbed me. There’s something unsettling about making time feel almost physical…something that can be cut into, exposed, and broken apart. Strong piece, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

                    • sorenbarrett

                      Thanks so much Tristan your words mean a lot my friend

                    • Durdica Porobija

                      A contemplative poem—even a philosophical one. There is a philosophy of time. The coldness between two heartbeats that you managed to observe is chilling. Powerfully moving!

                      • sorenbarrett

                        I thank you my friend for the encouragement and support it is most important to me

                        • Durdica Porobija

                          It was my pleasure.



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