Been here before yesterday

sorenbarrett

How strange, the west wind tells me I've changed
A falling rain calls me back to my domain
Snow is settling in, asking where I've been
I've been here all the while, I say with a fading smile

 

Will you be staying for dinner
Only if you're having roasted filet of sinner
What would you drink, a poet's ink
Blood of the dead goes to my head, better make it red

 

Will you spend the night
If over your bed we don't fight
Your room is over there
I'll sleep with you if you don't care

 

While I undress please don't stare
Why you wear no underwear
I thought you didn't care
Now bare, the bed to share

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Comments9

  • nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson)

    lovely flow to this my friend, much enjoyed

  • Thomas W Case

    There’s a mischievous gothic energy here, shifting from the melancholy of changing seasons into surreal dinner-table banter, dark humor, and sexual flirtation without ever taking itself too seriously. The “roasted filet of sinner” and “poet’s ink / Blood of the dead” lines give it a wonderfully macabre personality, while the final exchange turns the whole thing into a cheeky, deliberately awkward seduction.

    • sorenbarrett

      Thanks Thomas for your read and comment that is most valued. Yes my mind was drifting here and sex is often dark and sometimes awkward

    • orchidee

      Good write SB.

      • sorenbarrett

        Thank you Orchi I appreciate your read and comment my friend

      • Kevin Hulme

        This is like one of those French Art House Films.
        But in Poetry form. Nice one.

        • sorenbarrett

          Thank you Kevin I am not French but one can always steal. I appreciate the read and comment my friend

          • Kevin Hulme

            Merci beaucoup. 👍

          • Tristan Robert Lange

            You got me with this one, Soren! What begins in melancholy quickly becomes a delightfully twisted conversation filled with appetite, death, desire, and total absurdity. Dark, playful, and thoroughly entertaining, my friend! 🤣🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦‍⬛

            • sorenbarrett

              Thank you my friend yes such is life a mixture of all things. Appreciate the read and comment Tristan

            • Goldfinch60

              Good write soren leading to the joy at the end.

              Andy

              • sorenbarrett

                Thank you Andy I do so much appreciate your reads and comments

              • 2781

                Everyone should love a happy ending.

                • sorenbarrett

                  Thanks so much for the read and comment my friend

                • Jon Nakapalau

                  Can relate!

                  • sorenbarrett

                    Thanks so much for the read and comment Jon it is most appreciated

                    • Jon Nakapalau

                      My pleasure!

                    • soheil khodaparasti

                      A wonderfully strange and atmospheric piece. The melancholic opening gradually gives way to dark humor, gothic imagery, and playful intimacy. The contrast makes it both haunting and unexpectedly amusing.

                      • sorenbarrett

                        Thanks Soheil I always appreciate your takes on my poems and this is no exception.

                        • soheil khodaparasti

                          Thank you, my friend. That truly means a lot to me. I always enjoy reading your poems and exploring the thoughts and emotions behind them. It is a pleasure to share these conversations with you.

                          • sorenbarrett

                            The pleasure is all mine



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