im ur spidy ur my mary jane
i will take away ur pain
i will take away the strain
i will destroy the vain
u wont have to complain
cux ur my sweet candy cain
lets run away
hitch the next train
or hijack a jumbo plane
go to some place like spain
we can lite up the chemical chain
our love is illogical
its sacred and profane
we can finally dance in the rain
without restrain
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Author:
ishmeal mikeal (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: November 12th, 2010 23:12
- Comment from author about the poem: some stuff i always wanted to do
- Category: Love
- Views: 40
- Users favorite of this poem: Cheeky Missy
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Comments1
I like the pictures you painted.....and I LOVE the picture you put with it! It borders on idyllic with the lack of vanity and lofty superhero, but I dislike tainting the love by letting it at all be "profane".......fascinating piece....I like it....good "love" poem! Oh, and I loved the end-rhyming!
thanks for the critic i always like to know how to make it better thanks again cheeky
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