Part I
How I love to see your eyes
When you look at me like that!
Quite as if for all the world,
You'd set out your welcome mat...
How I want to run inside,
And just to be with you all day---
When you look into my eyes
In that open, welcome way!
13OCT07
Part II
I know he does not care for me.
I love his eyes, but they don't see me.
He's friendly and cool, but it seems quite cruel,
For his eyes,......they don't see me.
18 Oct 07
Ah, crushes, what girl is fortunate enough to escape them?
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Author:
Chic George (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: I had quite the crush on quite the handsome guy, and when talking to him, he was very friendly, but disinterested. It took me a little while to realize he was only being friendly and that I was the only one in love. And you know we are best inspired when we are experiencing what we are writing....
- Category: Love
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Comments3
nice work.... i felt to read it more times..... keep on writting.... u r a good poetess.. there is a lot study frm ur poems for me...
Aw, you're sweet! Actually the last stanza isn't quite properly rhymed or consistent in its syllables,....it just sounded "right" but I've not really tampered with it to make it better, probably I should....some other day, maybe.
you can do way better with a topic like this especially you cheeky i trust your comments over any one else cause i feel you know poetry better then me
Uhoh. I thought the first two quatrains were good, it was only the last stanza I knew was faulty.....in fact I thought it was nearly poetry with my description of entering into his heart.....hmmm. Well thank you very much for your reproof....keep holding me to a higher standard!
This is my favorite poem! Really, really, really, really, really good! ♥
Thank you very much. And Mikeal IS right...I should at least edit the last stanza....soon!
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