In dream think about your passion
Let go u with some one suggestion
Find some thing with your own creation
Let go u with some temptation
Love some one like a wonder
Let go u with amazing thunder
Life is not for looser
Let go u with chooser
Find a friend like a calisaya
Let me go with my pragya
Always ready for every position
Let me took this time first position
Dream what u wants like
Let go u with flow of lakes
Never hurt some one in his life
Let me go with your wife.
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Author:
Jks (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: January 14th, 2011 03:38
- Comment from author about the poem: This poem is my first creation, so i like it very much and i thing it is not best but starting to be a best one..........
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For your very first poem....and for all I suspect it is not in your mother tongue....Excellent!!!! My first "poems" are so simplistic I haven't really posted any of them...all you other beginning poets only show me up for your abilities in your starting out....Keep on writing and improving....I look forward to much more!!
Yet, if I may ask, what do you intend by your rather startling last line? It rather sounds like an adulterous amorous request, which against all the bulk of the poem preceding it, seems not exactly fitting.....you are initially seeming to express such freedom and yet no man is really free to take another's wife, really. Is that what you mean? Would you explain?
When i was writing this poem i thought about that person who never respect his wife and it does't mean something bad i just said if u can't understand your wife's feeling than, i will take care of her not as a her husband but as a good friend........
Oh, very interesting thought...thank you very much for explaining.
good start to your creative writing, don't let go of the flow of inspiration
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