Some steps are hard to take
Although it happens and no mistake
Not being there anymore
Just ruins the heart and makes it sore
A memory stays till eternity
Trying and keeping our sanity
What's left from the past
Is what made us feel the blast
The joy of life never lasts a lifetime
It's not a gd thing nor a crime
Faith always finds it's way through
It may help or ruin u
Lives going away without traces
the tears that drop down our faces
It's hard to say goodbye
Too many problems to start by
To all who has lost a friend
Rules of faith we can't bend
The feeling and the urge to shout
It's the feeling of ur heart being ripped out
Faith always has it's wrath
But we must take the right path
Their Memories live on forever
To mention and talk about whenever
A smile is what's brightens ur day
And through the downs it should stay
Sad Tears is not a solution
It's just a sad conclusion
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Author:
SWD Okaily (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: January 22nd, 2011 12:01
- Comment from author about the poem: i wrote this poem thinking about the people i have lost in my life , and whenever i read this poem it makes me feel secure that i know what is really happening and i should move on
- Category: Sad
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Comments2
Your end-rhyming is excellent and your rhythm fairly good as well. By "faith" do you mean "believing"? Like when friends leave, turning our to be false, deceiving our strong beliefs in them? It is indeed a sad conclusion. And your poem is a fascinating, serious contemplation in the mind of the bereaved/forsaken. You thus capture the feelings, dilemma and attempted solution beautifully. What did you mean by the second line of the third stanza? what does "gd" mean...."God" or "good"? Your poem was very interesting.....I enjoyed it.
thank you very much for the comment.... i meant to say faith as in life itself, something you cannot choose, (god's decision) and gd is good i wrote that by mistake... but thnk u 🙂
Thanks very much for explaining! Now I make more sense of it. Thanks alot....I enjoyed it! .
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