Demons and Angels of Us

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  Cheeky Missy January 23rd, 2011 18:44

  Well, actually, seeing your title included the demons, I think the conclusion would be more correct if your concluding line rather read...."A game the devils call "life." Afterall, the Lord Jesus Christ is the Way, the Truth, and the Life, and the Life of all the people He saves; while all the rest of mankind remains dead in their sins....so that what is this vain life we lead....can it truly be defined as life? And if our souls are calling to be freed, only He can make us free, as He says. This is an interesting, obviously thought-provoking piece. I enjoyed it. Another suggestion, after the two-word line "Be sad" are you missing an "are" in the next line...ie "there [are] times to do both"?

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    jazmine zillmerJanuary 23rd, 2011 23:17

    thanks! i would've missed that.... it is missing an "are". i haven't edited it yet so there is a chance it will change.... At first i had put "war" instead of "life", because trying to be happy all the time or trying to be sad all the time would be hard going.

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    Cheeky MissyJanuary 24th, 2011 00:24

    Hmmm. That is interesting to consider....maybe instead of calling it "... a game call[ed] war..." as you are suggesting, you rather replace "game" with "war" as, "a war...call life", you know? And being either perpetually happy or sad, I did not consider that to be your message, but rather that we face both continually, and not to be buried in the sorrow for the happiness will be inevitably marred by it. As to editing, for all the editing I think I do, I still go back and edit more, half the time.