Broken
If only you knew that nothing is well
I live with knowing never to tell
That this is simply nothing but hell.
My ends are reached, you cloud my dreams
I turn my head to your foul screams
But you’re always here, or either there it seems
My heart says and I obey
This simply game for you to play
Is an intricate hatred for me everyday
I wish for you, so patiently I wait
You never show up but you’re never late
Now I sit at heaven’s gate.
- Author: john ( Offline)
- Published: January 26th, 2011 18:21
- Category: Love
- Views: 66
- Users favorite of this poem: Cheeky Missy, Lonelykaren
Comments2
Wow. It is very sad. You conveyed the heartbroken state very well. 'Tis an awful picture you painted. Curiously she rather sounds like a demon, the way you are characterizing her charms...if they might even be termed such. Fascinating. And miserable....I hope it is not for real, for it is such a horrible tormented condition.
I wrote this a long time ago. Emotions are powerful. I think we live and die by our emotions. Perhaps you've been crushed like i have and can relate. Its all emotions, feelings, and how we deal and cope. I write to find comfort and rid myself of the emotions that lead to the appropriate action. Anger to homicide, sadness to suicide, and Love to.. well... that eventually leads to the previous stated emotions. I have so many more but have only thought to post a few. I think I should hang on to a couple of the best for myself. Again thanks for the comments.
I'm very glad to hear you are not thus presently suffering. You state it well...emotions are extremely powerful....so like driving or anything else "under the influence." The very fascinating thing about writing it out as you've mentioned is that it offers momentary relief, can further agitate, help move us in the right direction, and/or serve as reminder later of what is now quite past. And some are too precious to share...that is excellent discretion. I was just posting more old pieces of mine elsewhere today and was thus reminded of past emotions/experiences. I look forward to reading more of your stuff. I cannot presently say rightly whether I have tasted what you have expressed in this particular poem or if it is the perspective you've given it in. Thanks again for responding, for your thoughts and the little discussion...I enjoyed it.
WOW its deep and i LOVE IT. you are an amazing poet and always write more poems please. I actually enjoyed this.
To be able to comment and rate this poem, you must be registered. Register here or if you are already registered, login here.