Peggi

First Kiss

Kiss of love trying to make u cloud

No limitation of fly no other loud

First kiss this word make me so hotter

In winter kiss is enough no need of sweater

Close your eyes fall down in hands

Feel the heart bit faster than trains

Try to feel every second of first kiss

Because it full of love and bliss

Kiss is not only touch of lips but

It hope for a lover that she is not slut

When I was kissing my love

I want to kiss her so much

Sound when u kiss is like sweet

Kiss her so long so she can feel discreet.

 

Comments1

  • Cheeky Missy

    Sweet....delightfully romantic topic to write on. The image is so perfect too. A couple suggestions.....I would change "hiss" in the 8th line to "bliss"...same end-rhyme but seems more appropriate to this topic; regarding the 12th line, you might change it to something like "I want to kiss her so much" instead of "wove"....maybe?....just my stupid suggestions. Anyway, I certainly enjoyed this delightful little discussion on that wonderful first kiss!

    • Peggi

      Thanks i think u r right and i will..........

      • Cheeky Missy

        Excellent!..if I may say so. And your rating just went up to "9"...except they won't let me change it. Great job!

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