The search of consciousness
Comes when we wonder
What could come when we dare?
To follow what we desire
Even if the rules
Tell you not to
Imagine following
Our true voice
The one that gives us happiness
The one that gives us truth
The one that everything has;
Inside, outside and around
It is you who transcends
The one holding the opportunity
Just dare to see beyond
And Dare to live with wonder
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Author:
Dolphine (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Dare to be your true self.
- Category: Reflection
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Ah, delightful admonition....so dreamily elevating....and yet....er, Who made the rules? Why are we here? We broke the rules in the first place for such folly and what a disaster we've lived in ever since. We imagine we are not ourselves...but if so, then who are we? Will you say caricatures? But we are ourselves, only in different scenarios...nobody else. Anyway dear Dolphine, not to strive, but that is my bold take on it....it is delightfully dreamy and inspiring,...yet misled, seems to wee me.
I'm sorry .. but, I do not know what do you mean with this?
I intended to compliment you on the beautiful composition, yet without seeming falsely to agree with the erroneous conclusion laced throughout....you referred to breaking rules and something to the effect of realizing ourselves thereby it seemed, which considering God gave us rules in the first place, when we blythely think to just break them to find ourselves or live more fully, then we cannot but be headed only for trouble. Yet there seems to be the understanding that if we do not do so, we are not being "true to ourselves"; yet we are always ourselves, and yielding to such wanton "freedom" doesn't make us more real, just sinners, it seems to me.
Anyway, to disagree with the author at all about the theme of their piece is to look for trouble, which I did not want to have, so maybe I should've just not commented at all? Please forgive me.
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