A watch.
A watch that lives.
Listen...
Hear it tick
Hear it tock
A ticking watch on a dead man's wrist
Fastened tightly above his limp pale fist
How I wish it would just stop.
And time stand still.
But your soul has left.
Your existence is nil.
I will turn back the clock to just before nine.
To before you left
And replace your tired organs with mine.
For the world doesn't need me
But it really does need you.
The sun no longer shines, the sky no longer blue.
Your living watch.
Them tiny little hands
That tiny face
Controls the entire human race.
Eventually everyone's time is up
Aslong as it ticks
Everyone is living
Aslong as it tocks
Everyone is trying
Aslong as it living
Everyone one is dying
For time of death isn't the death of time. A clock somewhere, will always work just fine.
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Author:
Georgiarous101 (
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- Comment from author about the poem: I wrote this poem after I watched my grandad slip between this world and the next. I was fixated on watching his watch still tick. It angered me that it never stopped. This is my first poem I've put on here I'd really appreciate any feedback x
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HI GEORGIA - WELCOME. Awesome first poem because it's straight from your heart ! Love the structure pulsating with rhyme and rhythm as befits the subject - Tick -Tock - Tick - Tock - the passage of time never stops. There is a time to live and a time to die and your Granddad's time had come. It is sad but when my Grandparents died I knew they had gone to a better place. It was sad for me but a happy new beginning for them in Heaven. The analogy you draw is a paradox between the inanimate watch and your living Granddad because in the end even though he stopped his watch ticked on. Thanks for sharing such a beautiful and mystical poem - BRIAN
Thankyou so much I really appreciate the comment!xx
Thanks so much 😀 xx
Wow! What an amazing commentary on time, life and the juxtaposition of the two! I agree with Brian...the rhythmic pulse of the lines really supports and contributes to the poem's theme 🙂
Thankyou so much really appreciate the lovely feedback. It's a year today since I lost him and all these lovely comments have really helped me through it !xx
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