The light seeps in through the window cracks
Fleeting sights of fog mists
While the moon illuminates
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Author:
Despina Cambosos (Pseudonym) (
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The light seeps in through the window cracks
Fleeting sights of fog mists
While the moon illuminates
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Lovely.. Wonderful imagery.
However, this is not a haiku.
It's a wonderful poem, but it's definitely not a haiku.
A haiku is traditionally written as seventeen *syllables* in lines of five, seven, and five.
Let this poem of mine serve as an example:
"Angels have four wings"
"With two they hide their faces"
"And with two they fly
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The first line of this poem contains five syllables, the second seven, and the third five.
Love the imagery DESPINA. And another lovely mention of Sister Moon. One of her many gifts is "Night Illumination". You don't call it a HAIKU - for me it is in the poetic category of MINI POEMS which are equally precious, Yours has 22 syllables (9 6 7) It is a Poem because you have divided it into 3 lines which emphasises the message in each line . L1 Moonlight seeping in - LOVELY L2. Fleeting fog mists (love them off the coast of Savannah - SPOOKY) L3. The illuminating moon - AWESOME. I could drown in this poetic perfection - Thanks for carin' an' sharin' - Your Friend BRIAN
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