don't build her up just to bring her
down
don't lead her on just to shut her out
don't tell her things that make her smile
just to send her a text that'll have her
hurting for awhile
when she says she's fine please see
it's a sign
that girl is surely broken from the words you have just spoken
things would have been okay if you hadn't called her beautiful everyday
she would have understood, but tell her you never could
she thought you truly cared
for liking her no one else ever dared
yet in the back of her mind she always knew
it was way too good to ever be true
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Author:
ragsaph (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: May 7th, 2016 20:36
- Category: Sad
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Comments1
WELCOME SAPPHIRE - Thanks for a very powerful first poem. It is well structured and pulsates with rhyme and rhythm empowering the accusations of the words. In a good poem there is always a symbiosis between structure and subject. I'm a male and often we are guilty of not treating our Ladies with the respect they all deserve. Ladies are what makes the World a much much better place ! I love your contrasts: Build up - bring down # lead on - shut out # cause to smile - then hurt. Complementing her - BUT - In her heart - She always knew it was way too good to be true. Men - our Ladies deserve our respect let us resolve to always be true to them ! Thanks for caring and sharing - BRIAN
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